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the Hair Dresser

short, cropped, blonde hair and a
delicate neck-line
slender, almost timid shoulders
soft, green eyes that seemed
          to play with her pouty lips

she began to style her
dead grandmother’s gray hair

“are you married?” she asked

“yes” i said, and
the conversation became casual

 

H.L. Peterson (February 2007)

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one of my over 100 deleted AP poems written in 2007 ...

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    1 day ago
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    Oh my....I think I will come back and comment on this one later...It reminds me of the movie with John Candy, who fell in love with a gal who did up peoples hair in a mortuary....Will be back tonight...Stunning!


  • Tzipora
    November 7
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    nicely done. i really liked the visual image.


  • Edie gold member
    September 5

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    I am a sucker for conversational poetry. The undertones in this say a lot. I like this.

    Strangely enough, I once met a woman who made a living doing exactly this. hair and makeup for the dead. A macabe career, but she seemed to like it.


  • Nyx Iscariot
    September 3
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    hmm...


  • charcoal
    September 3
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    i love the details here and how the context is revealed later and then of course the ending.


  • Cat gold member
    September 1
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    nice...


  • Emmyb gold member
    August 31
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    love you dude.
    youve made my day.


  • Odds and Ends
    August 30
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    not abstract. real life. that's what makes it beautiful. people... they are fascinating.


  • sweet arrival gold member
    August 30

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    one thing i really like about your poetry is you never know what you'll read. this isn't as abstract as some others of yours, and the ending is one that made me smile. casual conversation sometimes is the deepest. although i did like how you made it seem that the conversation went dead, so to speak.
    resurrect more poetry, please


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 30

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    You've got my name, number and other site info, H.L. Please stay in touch, my Friend. Ya know I adore you and your words; I was fortunate enough to have been here to read them all in 2007. When I heard Dave singin' "Grace" on your page, it made my heart ache. lil' night

  • Rowan gold member
    August 30
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    funny how that word can change a mind, and a mood, in an instant, isn't it? lol.

  • Emmyb gold member
    August 30

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    100 deleted poems??
    makes me sad. I hope they come back to life over time.

    this one is sweet. its not like your others. its much softer.

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