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Dear Lavender,
When I was six, strangers to me were like God. I was lost, and the police found me. I remember the teddy bear. Maybe it calmed me down.
The lady who wore blue while writing papers on a desk eyed me curiously as I cried. She smelled of you. I remember because she whispered in my ear We are all lost, and you danced of the arch of her neck into my nostrils.
From,
Eighteen years
5th Avenue,
Becoming a woman was nothing without you. I wore you like Christmas. And just like summer, you made me hot.
I lost my virginity to you at 15. I also realized love was only a fairytale.
These days you lay on my desk, half used and alone. I’m scared to use you.
Yours truly,
The Ex-Sex addict
Dear Rubber,
Do you remember the night you, me and Andrew robbed the corner store. We both had to split the bill for his new tires.
It was only six months ago. But I still remember how my heart beat two four six eight. You remind me of anarchy and adrenaline.
I know now why they say you are addictive for a pungent smell.
Wishing you the best,
Mango Memories
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Author notes
Prompts
1. Ever smell something that stirs a memory? I'd prefer interesting combinations such as: the smell of pine needles reminds you of pissing in the woods at that one bon-fire. I don't know, something strange. Nothing like, the smell of Blacks remind me of him and how we were in love but he couldn't understand my pain and therefore broke my heart even though we're still together. Blah.
2. Write a letter, and no I'm not going to be super lame and ask you to write me a letter. Instead, write a letter to yourself at three different ages. It doesn't matter what ages just as long as they are significant enough to be involved in this piece.
A contest entry
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1750 points, ended September 8, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - quickie XXXII by Salty Hibiscus.
400 points, ended September 15, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Cigar Box (letters) by KytKitsune.
875 points, ended September 28, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Oops, forgot applause! =P
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So much thought evoked in my mind by so many memories untold in yours. Just from the scents, you created darling imagery and beautiful words that made me think.
I remember because she whispered in my ear We are all lost, and you danced of the arch of her neck into my nostrils.
Brilliant.
Keep on Writing the good Write!
Kyt the Kitsune
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I love it all
Wow those thoughts that simmer inside your head
left me thinking to myself
I really enjoyed reading
and good luck hun
Julie x -
This was such a unique piece to read, it left me wanting to know more about you from these three letters. Well done and best to you in the contest
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you have such a unique style that is so full of imagery and making me want to jump in a pool full of it. there are many lines that could be pulled from here as standing out to me.
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"I wore you like Christmas."
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"You remind me of anarchy and adrenaline."
those were some super-duper yummy lines.
This piece reminded me of GirlBomb and the decline of innocence into this quaking universe of boys and illegal-fun times. I thought the combination of ages was fantastic: the child searching for something higher, the teenager stumbling toward adulthood, and the reckless abandon of new-found independence.
this piece was so very alive, it pulsed and shuttered and I felt it running through my bloodstream.
thank you for entering.
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I didn't think I was going to like this at first, but then I read it a couple more times and it grew on me. I wasn't so keen on "From, / A lost 18 year old", which I guess is mainly what put me off, just because I felt it was a bit cliche. I like your attention to detail though. It's a very interesting retrospective piece.
As I am shoulder-deep in points, I will applaud you
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hmmm agrrees with the clicheness of that line and changes it ^^
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Glad I could help.
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i love the way you write- hands down!
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whishing
you are my best... once again you left me covetous
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AHmazing! one of the best I've read today, I need to read more of your stuff
x
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One of your best in my opinion, beautifully written, excellent take on the prompt(you naughty girl
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Brilliant write!
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Truly magnificent!!! i just loved this piece
the letters every thing!! Bravo!
with love and blessings
Rend
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This made me smile
Such a pretty write, I like it soo much. You have some unbelievable lines in this one! And until I read the prompt, the passing of age here was subtle but unbelievably well done. I wish I could pull out that kind of stuff just like you haha XD its absoloutly amazing.
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Lovely
We all are lost - so true , I can so relate to this . Lovely write I need to write the letters too .
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And love does a dance, the dance you know so well.
I like it, I like it so!
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I'm actually shivering after reading this.
The six year old, searching for god in the faces of passers-by.
The fifteen year old, sprinting towards adulthood, only to look back and see they tripped and fell halfway.
And the young adult, finding pleasure in the all the wrong things. Feeling that rush. Feeling alive.
You made me feel this.
I feel... alive.
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shhh... your giving me away!
thats why i wasnt online. Too busy writing this baby down.
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I remember because she whispered in my ear We are all lost, and you danced of the arch of her neck into my nostrils <__ amazing line.
I wore you like Christmas. And just like summer, you made me hot. <-- wow.
i loved this, good luck in the contest
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