When I was a wee kid on Whipsnapper Lane.
My mother was working on a cold day of rain.
Staring out the window with hot cocoa to sip.
Watching the rain slowly … drip drip drip.
I had nothing to do and no one to play.
So silent I sat on that cold rainy day.
When something upstairs rang out with a thump.
Boy did that thump sure make me jump.
I sprinted up the staircase to see what made the clatter.
What made that noise for the silence to shatter?
I rubbed my eyes not sure of what to say.
For something strange happened on that cold rainy day.
The hallway was now filled with lippy doop doodles.
While Star Bellied Sneetches ate pastry strudels.
The Lorax walked around not sure of what to do.
While the Cat in the Hat danced with Thing 1 and Thing 2.
And off in the corner sat Horton the elephant.
That elephant sure is faithful 100%.
In the middle stood a man with an S on his shirt.
He asked me " Kind Sir do you by chance have dessert?"
"For we have just eaten Green Eggs & Ham.
At the dinner party thrown by our good buddy Sam.
But at your dilemma we rushed and we ran.
So quickly we forgot our cup-o-cakes in a can.”
I paused quite taken at the man before me.
I thought to my self now who could this be?
“I’m sure we have something.” I said to the man.
“But I have never heard of cup-o-cakes in a can.”
The man laughed softly and said “It’s alright.”
As my dining room filled with a remarkable sight.
The Sneeches came running as well as the Grinch.
Who I had overlooked along with the Star Speckled Snitch.
But nothing could top the Yooks and the Zooks.
Who kept fighting over which side the butter was put.
The man looked at me with a giggly smile.
And Thing 1 and Thing 2 danced around for a while.
The man spoke up with a whiff and a yell.
Across the table silence then fell.
I placed some pies on the table to make them all merry.
Apple, Peach cobbler and mothers famous blueberry.
They all started eating as quick as can be.
And I looked at the clock, it was a quarter till three.
My mom would be home soon and there was no doubt.
That they should not be here while my mother was out.
The man with the S on shirt slowly did stand.
Again silence fell as he raised up his hand.
"We must clean up our mess, the pie and the juice"
The creatures all shouted "YES DR. SEUSS!!!!"
They all started cleaning the mess they had made.
While Thing 1 & 2 straightened the lamp shade.
I looked at the man with the S on his chest.
"Thanks for the company you're truly the best."
He smiled at me and ran up the stairs.
The Time had flown by with my mother not there.
The front door swung open and my mother came in.
" Why hello my dear child how have you been?"
I smiled to her and said "I'm ok."
Pretending it was just another cold rainy day.
On this side street called whipsnapper lane.
Hoping that tomorrow would bring a cold rain.
Perhaps they come back to visit again.
When my mom goes to work at a quarter till ten.
But to tell her what happened is really no use.
She would never believe I met Dr. Seuss.
Author notes
my fiancee is running a contest called "Disney or Dr. Seuss" so i just had to see if i could... hope ya like it this was purly to see if i could and for fun....it will not be in the contest.. I thought it would be nice to write how when kids imaginations run wild from children storys they hear and have it take life of its own.... hope you like it but if you don't thats ok...
~~~ Soulz ~~~
Written April 2nd, 2004
A contest entry
- Write about ANYTHING for 300 points!! Prewrites are welcome!! by AVoiceWithin.
300 points, ended April 25, 2004, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this is the bomb! great great write. and what a fine tribute!! enjoyed reading very mucho.
-turps -
Yah, Suess rocks. One of the few groups of children's books I'm not ashamed to have liked. Rhyme scheme here was nice, bouncy and appropriately Seussical. Made me grin.
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What a wonderful poem! It definitely brings back thoughts of childhood and sitting while learning to read with a Dr Seuss book in hand.
Strangely, did you know his name actually was pronounced 'soiss' like sauce with an 'oi'? But he decided to change the pronunciation. -
this is a very funny poem! it made me laugh so hard i think i'm gonna cry! excellent write dude! i give u two thumbs up!
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Totay Awsome
ohh my god....you just made me feel like a kid again. Dr seuss was my favorite author growing up. You receive a gold trophie in my book pal. GREAT POEM DUDE -
I'm not very good at commenting, sorry, but I loved this.
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most excellent ...
Spectacular write!!!!! I smiled the whole way through!
Most Excellent!!!
Yertweetyness
Thanx for your kind comments
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very good
What a great poem you have written here. The many hours of joy these tales brought me as a child. I have not read them in years but will be soon with a new little one in the house. Good thing I kept all my Tintin books.
John -
Kawaii
Very cute and very entertaining! I think you’ve managed to capture most people’s favourite characters and the general feel of Dr. Seuss’ work extremely well. A few rough spots that were hard to get by, mostly syllable count and word usage. But nothing that can’t be easily fixed. This poem is a wonderful gift for those of us who still remember (and act like) the children we used to be ;-) -
Great!
Oh wow, you have the Dr. Suess genes! lol, that was terrific, it was like Dr Suess came alive in you! Your so lucky! I love Horton the elephant! That was such a devoted elephant. Even after all it went through, it still sat on that egg! -
Rock on! Dr. Seuss is the coolest ever! I know Green eggs and ham by heart and at one point had the whole collection! It is so cool that you write in his style!
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Nice
i found this peice interesting, becuase when i first started on Allpoetry, i had a Dr Suess peice of my own. Mine however was embarassing, and i felt immature for putting it up. this however was very good, enjoyable and happy, and kewl lines. Nice stuff, CyA later -
I really love this. It's one of the cutest things I've ever read on here. It's a great children's story, well written, and it also covers a lot. Great write, keep it up. Hope to read more from you in the future.
~Miranda -
I love Dr. Seuss! And, I love this! Well done! Had me giggling all the way through! Very creative and imaginative!--Kel
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this was so much fun. you've done some research mister!!! I'm a huge suess fan (I'm currently wearing a one fish, two fish shirt) but really, I had a good giggle to myself reading this, i could just see suess' illustrations in my head, walls stained pink with juice, and blue with pie. I hope you enjoyed writing this as much as I enjoyed reading it!
im off
zzz -
I enjoyed this 100%. Thank you for sharing.
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thanks natalia I will try that... that you so kindly for helping... I truly am gratful
take care and god bless
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Great!
Wow very creative!! My sister liked it too! I think that's a Great contest that your fiance is running. It will be sure to attract both the children and the children at heart to participate in it This is truly a clever write, and I enjoyed reading it. I know I've said this before, but you have a huge imagination. Keep up the good work, and great job with this!!
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Cute, very cute. Only thing I can suggest is the syllable count again, but to hell with all that. I think this was a great piece full of imagery and delight and if any child were to read it I am more than sure they'd enjoy it. Its full of fun and holds the interest...
What ya could do is after you write it read through it a couple of times out loud that always helps I would say... But all round a good piece of writing.
One part,
"While Thing 1 and Thing 2 straightened the lamp shade."
Maybe just put, while Thing 1 and 2 instead of having to keep saying thing over and over...
But who am I to say?
Again
Nice piece of writing.
Natalia
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very delightful
hard work for such a pleasant read...
who in the world could not fall for Dr. Suess and all
the juice he cooks up in the books!
I wonder if the deceased Suess could allow you to be
Dr.Suess Jr?
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This was a great piece!! Very cute! I didn't know someone could write about almost EVERY character from Dr. Suess! But you did it! VERY well done!
God Bless you,
Jenna -
Lol, I am going to have to agree with galfalfa. Character use was amazing.
~Fedicinao -
lol you never seem to fail to bring a smile to my face ... i loved this poem ... it was beautiful and it did resemble ALMOST every dr. suess character we have all come to know and love so dearly in our hearts. the only good thing is ... at least you tried and by doing that you exceeded your limits and found new heights to learn upon .... i love you do much babe and you know that no matter what ... the flow of this poem was great and the rhyme scheme was as well ... i don't think it was long at all because to look at the dr. suess stories each and everyone of them tell a story in a poem like rhyme ... so i thought the length was great as well as the rest of the poem ... great write hun and keep penning ...
Love You
Donna
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fun stuff
This was superb! A fun read all the way through!
Bravo, you sure covered all the phrases and characters! Enjoyed this! Thanks!
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this is an absolutely darling piece of poetry, I'm so glad you decided to try and write it! The sentence structures sounded a little bit funny in some spots, but I couldn't think of any other word order to use that would let the rhyme scheme stay as unforced as it is. And besides, the Doctor himself wrote some silly phrases, I don't think he'd mind and neither should anyone else
wonderful write, and keep penning!
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I believe you when you say this was the most difficult thing that you have written. Thats the genius of Seuss after all, that it all sounds so easy when you read it!
The only suggestion I would have is to perhaps replace
Thing 1 and Thing 2.... with 'Things 1 and 2'... it still gives the same meaning but by dropping a syllable it flows better I think. See what you think anyway
Kat -
I just read someones comment about the rhyming sounding forced in the 2nd stanza and the Horton the Elephant stanza...and I disagree completely. I thought everything flowed perfectly - and I'm not a fan of rhyming, if it did sound forced I'd tellyah. WONDERFUL!
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Haha!! That was an absolutly adorable poem! I loved it! You did a magnificent job with this poem. If you entered it I'm sure you would have been more then worthy for the gold! Nice job. You should read it to your children some day
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glad you liked it eternally lovelorn it's always nice to hear that hard work paid off... it was hard to write at first but as the lines flowed it got easier I just had to get in touch with my inner toddler lol
~~~~~~~~ Soulz ~~~~~~~~~
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glad you liked it lylah it was definatly hard to write it actuall took me close to 4 hours when most of my poems take about a half hour to write....
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cool, dr suess is a hard one to write about and do it with justice. and you pulled it off perfect! the rhyme was great from my view and the flow was perfect to. i enjoyed this one it was clever and funny. a great job indeed.
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Not enough applause for this one!!!
Damnit this was great! you obviously did your research
i',m really impressed with this.. It made me chortle... and thinking of all the characters running around reminded me of being at my grandmas, shes a teacher and used to have all the books.
Was long but well worth the read yay
Jadey xXxXx
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this was fun to read very enjoyable, it has doctor Suesss and yet it is not as simple as the cat in the hat or any other, It is easy to understand that it is based on the Seuss books and yet has its own individuality. A write gone totally mad that was so much fun to read.
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good
wow a vry long poem well not that long but long enough to make me fall asleep but...lol no but it was good im just not into the longer poems im more of a dont read as much as poseble type of person but i liked it alot so good job at that thanxs
-nick -
glad you liked it... this was by far the hardest poem i have wrote.... but i think it was well worth it
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You forgot to ask how much water 55 elephants drink. Thanks for the trip down the Dr. Seuss memory lane. I enjoyed remembering all the different characters.
Jennifer -
Very Dr. Seuss-ish. It's quite good. I went into one of my old Dr. Seuss books and you captured his style very well. I absolutely love how you used the sound effects and made up silly words. Did you think of them all by yourself? It's very good. Now I have the urge to try some of my own Dr. Seuss writing. LOL. Thanks for the laugh. Great Write and Great Job!
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Definitely do not change it at all. It's a really amazing poem with good rhymes. Ok so it is long but you have really captured all of the crazy ideas of doctor seuss and used all of his characters really cleverly. Only sum one with good imagination could write something this good. brilliant!!!!!
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Snazzy
Not bad! Not bad at all. There are a couple places, however, where the rhyme seems somewhat..forced. Such as with the Horton the Elephant stanza, and the second stanza. Other then that it was fabulous! Keep it up dude. -
I love a good Dr. Suess book. He made me laugh so much as a kid. I still read him today when I get bored and want to regain a bit of that lost youth.
You didn't happen to find a Wocket in your pocket, did you? And did you hear Mr. Brown go moo?
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IT does have alot of Dr. Suess in it.. But I did not mean to make it sound like the Cat in the Hat... I actually was trying to make it sound like A boy that had nothing to do on a rainy day so his imagination ran wild from the books his mom would read him... do you think I should change it?????
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Yes it did, very much so in fact.
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thank you misty heart... it took alot to write this and I thought back to all the books my mom read me and tried to remember all the charactors I could... Did its sound similar to dr. suess????
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Wow! This was awesome! It was like actually reading a Dr. Suess story. Kind of similary to the "Cat in the Hat," though, so originality needs to be worked on, but other than that, you get two thumbs up! Haha. Thanks for sharing!
P.S.- In the 13th stanza, you may want to check your spelling on the word "straitened." I think it may be "straightened." If I'm wrong, I'm wrong. Till next time!!! -
I don't know why you'd want to make shorter, that's in response to the above comment. I think it's funny and I love it. It held my attention the whole time through, and for me that is saying a lot. Great job on this, I loved it.
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lol, this is quite long, maybe you could use complex sentences to make them shorter, My fav part was
He smiled at me and ran up the stairs.
The Time had flown by with my mother not there.
The front door swung open and my mother came in.
" Why hello my dear child how have you been?"
keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!
lol
pinkwhite
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