I lost you in between tattered words and blind photographs,
trying to comprehend the way desperate lines clotted and warped between us. it was bittersweet but more lemon than strawberry, and I never thought yellow was a very pretty color. I’m choking on the tastes of lies, truth, and heartbreak. we are cellophane transparent so why can’t I understand you? things change but friends are forever, right?
wrong.
la última hora and I didn’t know how to walk this path without you, so I tried to run but the gravel slapped against my thighs, and if you were beside me, we’d wear bruises like friendship bracelets and platonic promise rings. I want you to know I feel lost without you. silencing withered cries with shredded road maps, I don’t know where to go from here.
we are scratched clocks, erased poems, and footprints on the sand; we are castles fallen and faded prose. I feel like time should build things up instead of tear them down, but our songs don’t play on the radio anymore and we can’t break all the mirrors in the world and pretend we’ll never change.
you can rip the moon right out of my sky. and the sad thing is, I know you didn’t even want to. fate never loved me; and squished between hours and uncertainty, we don’t even know if it’s worth trying.
summer grew pale and grey. I caught the first leaf to fall between sleek pages and pressed them together with a prayer like that could save it, but I left the book out in the September rain and when I came back, it was gone.
Author notes
This is about losing friends and growing apart from them over time. I'm a senior in high school this year and I'm thinking a lot about the people I've grown away from in the last few years, and I'm afraid I'll never see again once I graduate.
i might change the title, it just doesn't really apply to the poem much. As always, I'd love any suggestions 
*FOR CONTEST 'SHOW ME HOW FAR YOU'VE COME'*: This is my most recent poem. The first piece I posted on this site: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2248926 ["Hidden Meanings"]
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Comments
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i think you depicted the loss of a friendship really well
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Amazing
This poem seriously brought a tear to my eye, it made me get shivers.. it was amazing. I love it so much!
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This is so very reminiscent of my style that I feel like I actually penned it. Aside from the subject matter, this poem screams Nicky. I absolutely loved it.
"it was bittersweet but more lemon than strawberry, and I never thought yellow was a very pretty color."
That was the best line in the ENTIRE thing. I could just... Oh God, this was incredible. I don't find very many people on here whose poetry I actually like, but this is GREAT.
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nice
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amazing
this is an amazing write and i truely
did enjoy reading it even though so sad
and painful, a great job and this is brilliant.
Very hard moving apart ones we love and
have grown close to but we find ways through.
A great prose and write, keep scribbling
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This is absolutely amazing. I love it. You've improved tons since your 1st write here; this is so much more complex and full of emotions than your other entry in my contest. This line is my favorite;
we are scratched clocks, erased poems, and footprints on the sand; we are castles fallen and faded prose.
Incredible job with this :] You are very talented.
Thanks for entering, & good luck
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A fine piece of prose poetry with many marvelous allusions (much like the famous Aanika) I thought this showed a great deal of talent! loved it!!
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this is absolutely powerful and brilliant!
i'm a sophomore in college so trust me when i say i know what it's like to feel like you are fading from your friends, to not know if it's worth it to strive for that connection that you once had with eachother....
"so why can’t I understand you? things change but friends are forever, right? wrong." i think the word "wrong" here is really sudden. maybe put a few spaces there, the word (as it is a single-worded sentence) will still have a lot of emphasis i just feel like it flows too much with the sentence before it; but i really like the lines
this stanza really freaking speaks to me:
"we are scratched clocks, erased poems, and footprints on the sand; we are castles fallen and faded prose. I feel like time should build things up instead of tear them down, but our songs don’t play on the radio anymore and we can’t break all the mirrors in the world and pretend we’ll never change."
This is a solid bookmark; thank you SO much for sharing!
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it was bittersweet but more lemon than strawberry, and I never thought yellow was a very pretty color <-- i love that!
we are cellophane transparent so why can’t I understand you? <-- I know the feeling =[
we’d wear bruises like friendship bracelets and platonic promise rings. <-- wow
this was amazing. =]
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amazing n i needed to read this cuz i lost a friend of 7 yrs n we r now talking again but arguing n she is blaming me for every thing that went wrong. i'll never see her again anyway so whats the point. anyway a good read. a fantastic write. i am a true fan of ur talent.
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Aww, this is brilliant! Ive grown away from alot of people and its a sad thing. Awesome write.
Midnight-tears
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