Should my voice carry
into the night
pushed to the side
wounded and scared.
Drowning in tears
frigid and worn
tattered from wonder
I leap through the fire.
My bleeding heart cursed
turns to dreams of illusion
carries on with obsession
a hopeless delusion.
Could I walk in these shadows
merely there, yet forgotten
tortured with thoughts
of a messy confession.
I wish on the past
that mirrors the present
the future won't hold
what traces my mind.
A lost little girl
in a maze of confusion
desperation consumes
the weary of heart.
I walk a path of survival
just to try and stay alive
sanity, not an option
when prayers go unheard.
Author notes
Just some randomness really.. but poetically put. I am going through a very rough time with myself and my own emotions lately and this is probably pretty well put in the terms of where I stand with myself right now. As always constructive criticism is encouraged 
Keep in mind I don't write nearly as much as I used to, so I am a bit rusty when I write anymore.
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful write. lots of powerful emotion expressed in this piece. I especially liked the last two lines. hope your prayers get answered, Krys. Take care.
Haley Mary
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We all do and more so when we are trying to grab hold our identities, not happy for whatever reason, been there done that and don't like it when it comes around all over again, He goes after those that may seem far away, so you are under the shadow of His wing no matter what you are going through, He goes through it with you...after all angels with no halos do endure alot stay encouraged and this emotional packed write is Endearing, humbling and well done. Blessings.
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Thank you so very much for your comment. Your words were very inspirationalI am glad you liked my write
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This is a fine piece, especially for someone who claims to be rusty lol. I think we all do some inner searching often, or we would never learn anything. Beautifully done. best to you always
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Thank you. I am a bit rusty really.. lately it is hit or miss with my writes, but I have been writing a bit more these days than I have in over a year now.I am so glad you enjoyed the write.
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Firstly I think you should carry on writing, just as much if not more than you used to because not only does it help our souls to recover by letting out and venting whats on our mminds but you are very good at it. It helps to recieve feedback that is as positive as you deserve because it makes you feel good, this all helps in becomming you again and also gives you the confidence to go out there and do it. I did feel a little sad reading this but then I also felt admiration for such a brave and powerful write, im not doing this to earn a free membership i am genuinely sincere in every word I have written to you today. Take care kathrin x -
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it is great to receive good feedback, any feedback really on something you are proud of and something you are emotional about. Thank you so much for your kind words and thanks for saying it was a brave and powerful write. I like to think I have a very openness about my writing. Not only really on paper but in my real life too, I try to be as open as possible in everything I do. Never been one to hold back feelings or go with the flow. I kind of make my own rules as I go. Thanks so much for reading. I am very glad you enjoyed the read.
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It is a lovely write, wouldn't change anything... The flow is perfect and it lets a mind wander into its own illusions...
I loved it..
illusion
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Thanks Goddess.. I really appreciate your kind words
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Very poignant
Beautifully written, Angel. Unfortunately, I can identify with your words. Best wishes to you in your recovery. -
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Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed the read and I am sorry you identify. I guess most people probably identify with my words, although the reasoning behind them might be different than my own reasons. All the same, I think I left it open enough to the imagination to sort of thing of it as even.. an illusion. Where the reader can actually take that thought and make it into something completely different than what it really is, but at the same time I was blunt and to the point.. without making it in your face.. That was a real ramble.. lol. Sorry bout that. Have a great day!
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