The crashing sea spoke in his roar:
I heard the stormy waters cry,
In autumn, on that foggy shore.
Upon the sands he swelled and tore,
His breakers crested ever high;
The crashing sea spoke in his roar--
His words around my feet did pour--
In rivulets they brushed me by,
In autumn, on that foggy shore.
I heard his silver voice implore:
"O come to me, my love! Come nigh!"
The crashing sea spoke in his roar--
And there my heart was captive sore:
His pleading I could not deny,
In autumn, on that foggy shore.
But I will venture there no more--
He breaks beneath a violet sky--
The crashing sea spoke in his roar,
In autumn, on that foggy shore.
Author notes
another sea poem - a weird one I penned while trying to overcome a persistent attack of writer's block(again. . .) A villanelle is a French form, which has a complicated rhyme scheme of aba aba aba aba aba abaa, where the first and third lines of the first stanza repeat as the last line of the following stanzas, in alternating order. . .
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A contest entry
- Form Poetry by KnightOfTheRose.
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what do you think of it
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Wow
This is fairly stunning
I never really use these Form poems, I can't bring myself to do them xD
Amazing.
Joshua =)
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I didn't like the use of roar too many times. It seemed to be used as more for a lack of better words than any specific effect which was unappetizing. Everything else was good though. Good rhyming and interesting imagery and figurative language
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there's a reason for all the repetition - the form is a villanelle, which requires that the first and third lines of the first stanza be repeated in alternate order throughout the rest of the poem... that's why I repeated "roar" so many times: the form required it, and I'm picky when it comes to following the set form of something... guess I ought to post the requirements of the villanelle in my author notes so people will know what it is
glad you liked the rest of it though 
Elinor
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Very nice. I've read and commented on this poem before too
Thank you for taking the time to enter. Excellent work and best of luck in my contest.
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silly typo
I meant to say that I want to read this poem again, not the "contest."
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Oh, God, I want to read this contest again and again!
This villanelle has many of my favorite things, especially the sea, personification, metaphors, and romance. Put all these together, and you create magic. The repetition in this form creates even more magic. I've never tried a villanelle, but I took a photo of an old man with his bamboo fishing pole on the coast of Port Vendres, France when I was in the U.S. Navy. I'm inspired to write my first villanelle about that experience, since it's a French form. It's a great photo. When I get a scanner, I'll have to put it on the poem. Thanks for the inspiration, Lady Elinor.
Don
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I have never seen a poem structured like this, which makes it all the more intriguing. This is obviously difficult, but is written so well. There is so much beauty in the image painted through these words. I am in awe.....
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thank you in case you were wondering what the form is, it is a villanelle, which is an ancient French form, rhyming AbA* abA abA* abA abA* abAA*, meaning that the capitalized As are the repeated lines. . .sounds complicated, I know
so glad you liked my poem 
Elinor
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This is GORGEOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Not once does it descend to mere versifying! What a wonderful villanelle, using the form in a magnificent fashion!
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ah, Purrs, thanks so so much you don't know how pleased I am to know you think that way of my little villanelle written when I was only trying to get over my block. . .
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I wish this would happen to me when I was "just trying to get over my block". JEEZE!
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Ah, ah, yes, a most fine and lovely villanelle here! The call of the sea is irresistable, no? And you have shown that call most wonderfully well in this fine French form!!! Loved it!
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This is a truly beautiful Villanelle with wonderful rhyme and flow and vivid imagery. This is world class poetry my friend.
Love,
Amera♥
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A beautiful poem about the sea. I must say you got over your writers block quite nicely. I can't think of any way you can improve on this Keep up the excellent work
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thanks very very much for your comment, Steve
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You're welcome
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