your words made me weep
hurt me wound me bound me
last night I cried in my sleep
through cracks dark sorrows seep
smut me loot me mute me
your words made me weep
I find what I reap
taint me stain me blot me
last night I cried in my sleep
swirls of anger in sweep
lash me bash me slash me
your words made me weep
your blows go deep
crush me push me smash me
last night I cried in my sleep
my path is so steep
test me stress me wrest me
your words made me weep
last night I cried in my sleep
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This has the power of words, and pictures. I refer of course to the pictures it creates in the mind. It is an elegant combination of violence and peace. Does that make sense? I am sitting before a screen on a grey morning, but these words of yours should leap around the world, where abuse takes place. Beautiful. Keep up the good work. :-) K.
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Thank you so much, Keith ...
and: of course your words make sense. Forever the whip and its submissive shadow ... Until there is only Love. Ah. I will forever keep on hoping.
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This is an extremely well constructed villanelle. It is lyrical in its presentation. I love the exceptional power of understatement. Bravo!!
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Nursery Rhymes are such too ...
understatements. Interesting that not even a child can miss the meaning ... but often so called adults do?
Thank you for reading, Allan. I appreciate it.
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This villanelle expresses the crisis of sorrow, when there is only anger and pain without vision of its possible ending. People hurt each other, even if they intend not to; that is our tragedy. Best wishes.
M
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No hurt ...
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So it is, Myra. Like many children, I learned not to express hurt. It is a terrible habit for adults to have.
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this was a beautiful poem. you did a very good job on it. thanks for sharing with all of us here on allpoetry. great job.
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Thank you very much.
I appreciate you reading my work.
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