I recall sitting cross legged
on her floor
star struck amongst the
strangely comforting crumbs
of dead biscuits and
the lost spin offs of
her toe nail clippings.
I looked up her cotton skirt
as she strode to the
low-fi and put
on “my life in the bush of ghosts”
by those weirdos
byrne and brian eno.
She sat beside me
mirroring for a moment
then handed me
me the fat one
I’d struggled to roll
five moments earlier
in the cold.
I remember rolling back
and hearing
strange sounds dance on
a Jim Beam ceiling.
It felt like the invisible
atmosphere of comedy
was snuggling my soul
and I laughed
lung-fulls of stupidity
like I always hoped I would.
I can see her face in my hands
fixed and pale
except for the
glistening lines
of black blood
weeping
from two yellowed bandages
stuck fast to her eyes.
I couldn’t remember leaving
until now,
twenty five years later.
Author notes
Inspired by Charles Bukowski's "I Made a Mistake" and the album "My Life in the Bush of Ghosts" by David Byrne and Brian Eno.
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this is one of my favorite poems, and not just of your poetry, of all poetry.
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I am truly humbled by your gracious comment. Thank you so much. Kx
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This reminded me of my younger years. So much. Great piece. Thank you.
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Thank you so much for the bronze! Sorry it took me some time to say that - but so glad you enjoyed.
K
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Kezz . . . a remembrance that speaks from the dusty corridors of the heart, cleansing it's chambers word by word . . . You're writing so very well at present, things seem to be perculating at a high pace for you right now . . . KEEP EM COMING!!!
Marc
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Wow :] This is beautiful. You've obviously come a LONG way since your 1st write on AllPoetry. Congratulations. The imagery here is so beautiful; so much more complex and thoughtful than your other entry. Stunning write =]
Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest
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Forgive me - I never do the analyzing thing with poetry...I simply know that if I am smiling by the end of a poem and my eyes are reaching up once again for the first line, that it's good. This is good
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