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with mainlined razor blade legs

go on and do your thing you all mighty god blessed fuck-of-a-wads

 


play tea time with cookies and wear dresses with print but make it long ones

 

 

because your legs look like they've been mainlined with razor blades

 

 

 

so much for keeping you safe and secure inside this mind that I own

 


and tell you pretty things like pretty maids all in a row and oh yes your hands

 


are as smooth as a baby's bare ass and whore red nail polish is

 


definately your color it matches your bottom lip that you chew

 


on all the time  from playing the white line game with mcdonalds straws

 


and the blood that poors from it as you swab it up with a tissue

 


that  you've blew your nose on 15 times and has accumulated

 


green and brown boogars that are harder than the dick

 


you didn't suck last night because you wanted to play oh so

 


prim and proper when we both know you would have spread

 


your legs up and over and behind your neck that looks

 

 

like a goddamned turkey's gobbler that the other

 


women and men want to fry with bacon to give you some flavor

 


go on ahead now I free you for this day and night together like

 


hot link sausages and dentyne chewing gum

 

 

go practice what I have been saving you all from so chew a double piece and

 


let the lining of your mouth come off along with your false teeth

 


that you spat across the dance floor while chuckling like a first grader

 

 

trying to get the attention of the drummer who by now has a nice pox

 


growing in places that weeds wouldn't take seed in

 

 

I'll smoke my cigars and some cheap cognac as you all come to me

 


in forlorn fabricated signs you mashed with tape on each others back

 


rules you see rules rules rules I had you live by and

 

 


one by one you came back to me

 


stabbing backs you rant and rave because

 

 

I let you be human with no constraints




one by one


in perfect order

 


behind the befores

 


in front of the afters

 

 

for shape and shadows

 

 

 

it's dying time out there

Author notes

PROMPT-- She Set Some People Free, Without Limits
and they all killed each other by the end of the day...






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  • Dalaney gold member
    October 7

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    I know you don't need a comment from me to justify what a wonderful writer you are, so I just want you to know that I am reading you. L


  • Amera gold member
    September 30
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    humm... this reminds me of the work of that AP poet Edna Sweetlove.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Barry Hodges
    September 5

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    I loved this - there are some VERY nasty images out there!
    - a neck like a goddam turkey's gobbler
    - spreading legs UP and OVER!
    - "boogars" harder than an unsucked dick!
    You will be interested I know to learn that in England we call these items "bogeys" and we like to think of them as green or white - a brown one is a VERY nasty concept, I assume it contains dried blood which makes it extra unpleasant.

    One typo here, dearest:
    "and the blood that poors from it as you swab it up with a tissue"
    I assume "pours" unless "poor" is a verb I should add to my personal dictionary.
    It's got to be 3 clappies even though have used up all my freebies today. Maybe I'll borrow some from Edna.


  • zochit2me gold member
    September 2

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    You my dear Cinnary are one of a fucking kind...UNIQUE is soooooooo beyond who you are...UNIQUE is NOT even in the same fucking category as you

    This rocks

    and fuckin rolls

    and


  • DolceVito gold member
    August 30
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    LMAO...Superb piece, excellent take on the prompt...No rambling from me


  • IronMaiden1236
    August 30
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    Whatever...

    Dont' need the clappies so ain't gonna blow a thousand consonants and vowels wortha smoke up your arse....This shit's good!!!

  • pocket pixie gold member
    August 30
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    ouch
    not often words slice neater than a razor
    but they have here

    nice one


  • wbiro gold member
    August 29

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    You entered a new comment, nice (better than a prewrite)... and you chose a philosophical/political piece over love (it would indicate a male author in most cases, but I'll reserve my guess until last)...

    then I checked your categories, Mucho Grossness...! further speaks of a male... (but why is something in the back of my mind whispering otherwise?)

    Well, I just read it, and it reads like a long, lingering death rather than one by the end of the day... lingering through adolescence right on into young adulthood, wearing off for most by middle age, but that small percentage who are still engulfed by it contains a certain percentage who carry it right on into old age...

    and that is where this piece could be, in some old folk's home in the future (to account for the false teeth), when the current generation ages, carrying with them all their worst habits and mentalities, waiting for the pusher-man (I haven't used THAT word since... 1969! ) to show up covertly every other Friday as the birthday clown... (hey, I see a future business opportunity- old folk's homes for society's failures... it would be Obama-funded here in the US, since he and the Dem's are so compassionate (yeah, right), a non-profit operation... think of all the twisted stories that would come of it... it would keep the next two hundred and fifty generations 'straight' owing to the horrors stories alone...) (yes, there IS a purpose to being screwed-up, after all, if only for others to learn from...)

    So, a tour-de-force in human excrement... but I can't be so harsh, for most people end up where their physical appearance takes them, there is little choice in life, and so people do the best they can with what they've been given, and for some, it means being bad... (of course social experiments with lab rats have shown that it is all due to overcrowding)...

    ah, got me to vent and ramble... you know, rambling contests are extremely difficult to read (and write for), nevertheless I was beginning to miss new entries... yours was like a big steak after a gummy bear diet...

    So, my guess, are you male or female? The narrator seems to be female (in a straight world), so that is my guess... and one who needs to be consumed, I would add, judging by the angst... hopefully by love before self-destruction... (though the former doesn't happen often enough before the latter sets in)... your narrator here seem to be in the last stages of the latter...!

    So, I'll take this piece as being inspired by the prompt, and not reflecting it literally; more like a 'similar mood' presentation... and 'mood' is its main feature, for the images defy logic...! All very surreal and abstract... kind of like a 60's psychedelic flik where you can't figure out what's going on... (but in those cases it was because the stoned creators hadn't a clue, either)...

    and black background, befits the hellish nightmare and bleak mood you've presented here... gave me flashbacks of all the times I've passed through such crowds as I walked through the Valley of Death...



    • Cinnarry gold member
      November 19
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      I think I've just realized You've given me a silver. I apologise in haste, bad karma floating around. I thank you belatedly and shamefully. My rudeness appalls me. I'm glad you liked the rambling, and I thank you ever so much for the time and effort.

      oh...I'm a woman.


  • geckogirl silver member
    August 29

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    hahaha Cin, lovie I gotta remember not to drink coffee when I'm reading your work. ffs I so pissed myself in the imagery at...
    your legs up and over and behind your neck that looks
    like a goddamned turkey's gobbler that the other
    women and men want to fry with bacon to give you some flavor
    gold here






  • lunarlunacy
    August 29
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    what you do with language

  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    August 29
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    *smiling* ... *cheers* baby


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 29
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    Oh my word!

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