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Unknowing

All I wanted was to be near you,
walk side by side with you,
and see a smile upon your face,
to take my pain away.

I would not have needed a hug,
I didn't crave to taste your lips,
I didn't want you to tell me
"Everything will be okay".

All I needed to stop my tears
and revive my slowly dying heart
was to have you to make me laugh
and put a smile upon my face

~without even knowing you're doing a thing.

Author notes

There's this guy I like...and I've never felt this strongly about a guy before...I walked home with him a lot during the year that i was in grade 10 (and I'm in grade 11 now) and a month after I started walking home with him (ish...) my Grandma died...and just walking home with him would make me feel better for the brief 10 or 15 minutes it took, and he never knew how much he helped me through...

and this summer, when my Grandpa died...since it was the summer, I didn't walk home from school with him...and all I wanted do, when it felt like my world was falling apart, was talk to him...and it would have made me feel better (i never ended up talking to him over the summer, I'm not sure I would have been able to keep my composure...)

...it's not just one of those crushes where you strictly want to kiss and hug this guy, I just love being around him in general, just observing him sometimes even...it's an amazing feeling...

kayla*
Written April 2nd, 2004

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  • Juicebox
    April 23, 2004
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    this is a really beautiful poem, so touching. I'm sorry to hear about you grandma and grandpa, and I know how you feel when you just want to be around someone. Keep up the good writing.
    ~Jo~


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    April 12, 2004
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    Very well done Kayla
    Always follow your heart
    Love this good luck in the contest
    Come read my new haiku now LOL
    Luv ya
    Susan~~~

  • allaplgs
    April 2, 2004
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    Wicked!

    I hate that feeling. God do I hate that feeling. Argh, I feel your pain.

    This is why I love poetry. Your poem is so small, but god is it powerful! Who says size does matter? Whoever did was way off!

    Some of the smallest poems have the most meaning, even if they are only a few lines long - they can say a million different things.

    I love this poem. its cool because many people can relate to it. I love that!

  • dying rose
    April 2, 2004
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    aww this is GREAT keep writing AWESOME JOB!!! rosie


  • Poet Raja
    April 2, 2004
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    Exquisite

    Very well expressed. And the author comment almost brought tears to my eyes. Wish you had found a way to talk to him. What if you lose your composure?

    Tears as you talk to him would have been so comforting and he would have been a pillar to hang on to. Never hesitate to do what your heart wants.

    By the way is he still in your school? If he is not find him, kiddo.

    May God bless you.

    Love from India - Joel -


  • flowingwords
    April 2, 2004
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    I really enjoyed this, You completely understood what I wanted, when you can look beyond the physical and grasp the emotional ...A pleasure to read and thanks so much for the entry,Best of luck!
    ~Kimberly~


  • Runawaytrain
    April 2, 2004
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    This is perfect! And I understand it so completely. I have someone who does this for me, and I hope that I do it for him too.

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