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Hollow

Can you see through me,
do you know i'm there?

Can you feel me,
or is it just a gust of air?

Feel the breeze,
watch the seas.

:::I'm waiting:::

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short sweet and to the point

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  • JesskaSlayde
    November 5

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    i like this. its not one of those long poems that takes half an hour to read because the writer has taken a simple idea and tried to dress it up all pretty. beautifully written
    well done


  • ZachP silver member
    September 14

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    Absolutely, dear poet.
    I love that you were able to be so concise in this, and your talent definately shines through -- you capture so much in just a handful of words; the longing and the emotion seep through wonderfully.

    Thank you for sharing; I wish you all my best.

    Zach Estel.