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A Daydream (Haiku)

Dancing in a field
I inhale the bloomed beauties

Giggling children.

A contest entry

I'm 11 years old. Enjoy

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  • Everwind Rising
    1 day ago
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    This is great! Very good haiku. I wish that I could write haiku this well.

  • monkey3243
    August 29
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    nice haiku i like it *<


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    August 28

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    This is vibrant and inviting, little gal. You did the traditional haiku form quite well. I can see this, smell this, hear this. It made me smile. Just exceptional!