can't you hear my heart scream?
ripping silently as we talk,
bleeding in the night as i dream,
sewn together with heart-breaking locks.
A contest entry
- D - A - R - K by skilter.
877 points, ended September 13, 101 entries
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woah i like this!it sounds like a desperate call for help i really love it soo much emotion put into it!
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Short but amazing, you've put all your emotions in this with just so little words!!!!Great write!!!!
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WOWEEE
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Amazing
A wonderfully constructed poem. You show great pain and sorrow with words that make MY heart break just reading them. I can almost see the pain that caused this wonderful poem. I have no criticism, other than keep writing with feeling!
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i love it
wow amazing
that how i feel ai the time
my harts screaming but no one cares -
wow. this is amazing. you used so few words and conveyed so much pain. great job.
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BRAVO! BRAVO!
A powerful ink you used in this poem
you really should add this ...beauty...to the Gluttons Read list!
They would enjoy how you stitched it together!
well done poet...took some guts to write it simply and clearly!
ears/Seattle
GLUTTON of Punishment SALUTE!
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Nice
well well after this long time without one of your pom i finally see one it is skillfully written and simply put into these great lines well done it flows well and the words are written to express your emotion greatly a bit nostalgic if you ask me. -
Oh my gosh,
I most totally love this poem . & xD it made me smile inside [which is probably awkwardly weird.]
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yep, hear you screaming, cool poem. can you hear me?
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