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Sound that Found Me

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Without words, I tried to grasp loss. Confused, I couldn't remember a story to tell. Then, soft bells started to jingle.  I was looking from above, saw the visagraph of mountain ranges; the shortsightedness of the earth.

A man appeared to the East. He was standing in my dream on a zenith, looking up to me. I asked him:

 

How do You link the cosmos -- in rays or in waves?

 

He laughed; happy sounds echoed through space ... crystal bells, lingering, then fading.

 

He then turned to me, saying:


I link the cosmos by touching stars with laughter, making them laugh.

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Prompt: 100 words story

This is a real dream of mine. It always gives me peace and a smile.

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  • sisyphus
    September 20

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    i'm bothered at the very beginning by the picture, it's super cheesy and the faint jesus takes something that was maybe a little subtle in your piece and makes it glaringly obvious.

    your imagery is alright, it's almost nearing something that speaks to me, but it could definitely be a lot stronger.

    i like what you're getting at, and the way you express it is interesting (if a little derivative of madeliene l'engle). the thing that gets me about this piece though is the last line - the dobule use of laughing is needlessly redundant.


    • myrataal silver member
      September 28
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      Thank you so much ...

      for this HM. I truly appreciate it.

      Love
      Myra


  • PerVirtuous
    August 31

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    This is one of my favorite shorts ever. This is literally true. It is not symbolic. I am moved once again by your great wisdom. You are ever so kind to share it with us.

  • Bob Fox
    August 28

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    My

    Simply beautiful. To reach out and touch the Cosmos. Perhaps my spirit will allow such wonders.


  • Cannonsfire
    August 28

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    I wish I had those kind of dreams C


    • PerVirtuous
      August 31
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      Have some of my 8-alarm chili! You'll have this kind of dream and much more!

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