What use will it be
if i cry out all the time
will it put an end
to that blinding fear?
what use will it be
if i think over and over again
will it bring hapiness
put an end to my gloom?
bring sunny days
to this dark land?
what use will it be
if i plan to runaway
what use will it be
if i go faraway
will it give me the corage
th chase all my fears
will it help me to overcome
the harshness of this world?
with something in my heart
full of pain and agony
over the days i spent
somehow not my way
with streams of tears
ready to rush out
over everything i knew
was never the way i pleased...
A contest entry
- BWOM~~~~~Best Write of the Month...#5! by islekine.
1050 points, ended September 5, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honest opinion?
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I did like this found a few typos and you need to make the I uppercase just my view thanks for taking the time to enter our contest be well.
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Nice depth in this - something most people can relate to. So many times in life, it does no use at all to complain as things can't be changed.....but you can learn from them.
Other than some typo's, this read fairly smooth.
nice job
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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This is a very sad write.
you may want to go over this...there are a few typos here and there...if you want me to point them out, I will...I will come back to comment ...and remove this comment...Best wishes always! -
Nice job,
Sometimes we must pause, and think why we feel so lost, and pray for God to ease our pain. Life is never really a bed of roses, and when we have a moment of happiness it's short-lived. Yes, it's true. At times we all just want to--run away from life. But remember you are someone. You count, and yes, you can do anything.
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