Love is a simple calling
Never galling, never stone
To be its opposite, hate
Is to be irate, alone.
To love is to give sweet hope
Offering a rope through storms
Anchoring hearts, minds and souls
Leaving no holes, love transforms.
Author notes
Prompt:
#12
Lightenings viii
The annals say: when the monks of Clonmacnoise
Were all at prayers inside the oratory
A ship appeared above them in the air.
The anchor dragged along behind so deep
It hooked itself into the altar rails
And then, as the big hull rocked to a standstill,
A crewman shinned and grappled down a rope
And struggled to release it. But in vain.
`This man can't bear our life here and will drown,'
The abbot said, `Unless we help him.' So
They did, the freed ship sailed and the man climbed back
Out of the marvelous as he had known
Seamus Heaney Poems
A contest entry
- Unusual Form Rounds Contest by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended September 26, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you for your entry
A unique perspective on the prompt. I would say that love is what brings us to help those who need it.
The form was done well, syllable count was accurate as was the internal and end rhymes. Good flow. Please see my rubric for further details.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God bless
TammyCriteria
20-18
Exceptional
17-14
Innovative
13-10
Commendable
9-6
Competent
5-1
Emerging
Score
Prompt Development
Expresses and develops meaningful and original perspective on prompt
Expressive and developed treatment of the prompt
Adequate focus and development
Some focus on prompt but lacks development
Unfocused and unclear
20
Organization
Form of poem appropriately and powerfully addresses the subject , each line focuses on prompt
Form of poem is appropriate to the subject, focus maintained throughout
Form of poem is appropriate to the subject focus maintained throughout
Form of poem is appropriate to the subject, focus maintained throughout
Form is poorly constructed, focus is not maintained throughout
18
Poetic Language & Imagery
Sensory details and figurative language create vivid images that contribute significantly to the meaning of the poem; sound devices such as rhyme, alliteration, or onomatopoeia are used effectively to contribute to the meaning of the poem
Sensory details, figurative languages and sound devices contribute to the meaning of the poem
Sensory details, figurative language and sound devices may be overused, underused or inappropriate to the topic
Confusing or inappropriate use of sensory details, figurative language or sound devices
No use of sensory details, figurative language or sound devices
18
Use of Language
Word choice is vivid and exact throughout; grammar, mechanics and usage are correct, enhancing the thoughts and images
Precise word choice; no error in grammar, spelling and mechanics
Word choice occasionally vague, repetitive or imprecise; few errors in grammar, mechanics or usage
Word choices tend to be vague, repetitive or imprecise;
Consistently difficult to understand due to errors in grammar, mechanics and usage
17
Overall Impact
Poem captivates and inspires reader; is an excellent representation of the prompt/form
Poem attracts reader’s attention; is a good representation of the prompt/form
Poem is adequate and provides a reasonable representation of the prompt/form
Poem lacks inspiration
Poem fails to inspire
19
Length (five stanzas)
Disqualify any poem exceeding line limit by five lines
Total
92100
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Fine Stuff!
Oh, short, pithy and so very, very romantic! Neat and nifty with highly unusual and unexpected rhyming... oh, I loved it, indeed!!!
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Your prompt:
Lightenings viii
The annals say: when the monks of Clonmacnoise
Were all at prayers inside the oratory
A ship appeared above them in the air.
The anchor dragged along behind so deep
It hooked itself into the altar rails
And then, as the big hull rocked to a standstill,
A crewman shinned and grappled down a rope
And struggled to release it. But in vain.
`This man can't bear our life here and will drown,'
The abbot said, `Unless we help him.' So
They did, the freed ship sailed and the man climbed back
Out of the marvelous as he had known
Seamus Heaney Poems
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