Drowning in sorrow,
wither from blight,
the white noise of sadness
as black as the night.
Through endless dark
and painful thought,
from attitudes, mindsets -
through the world taught.
Glistening tears,
gliding down a rough cheek,
a meek heart shows its face
when its walls are weak.
In a forest of silence
is one's sanity at hand;
the quiet sound echoes
all through the land.
~But in the silence,
one can find solace;
throughout all my days,
hope and faith guide.~
Author notes
Best I could do, in my current state. I still liked it, albeit not my best. I still hope you enjoy! ^_^ Also, just coincidental, 16 lines in the first, 16 words in the second. 
I like patterns a lot. So, naturally, things work better for me that way. ^^ I used the "white noise" prompt, if you didn't see it when you read.
--Daniel
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Edit: This turned out better than I thought. Rereading does wonders to comprehension. 
A contest entry
- Round 2 :D by Nakatrea.
400 points, ended September 1, 9 entries
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well... the prompt was the title... um but you didn't quite use the title. which i suppose is alright? I'm not really complaining - just pointing it out.
i'm not the biggest rhyme fan but you seem to have done it pretty well.
brownie points for patterns!
the white noise of sadness <- i like that concept A LOT just so you know
thanks so much for finding time for me and putting up with my nagging. i think it payed off
♥Kat
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Indeed...you are welcome. ^_^ This was an effort through tired wits, so I'm sorry it wasn't quite up-to-par. X_x
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you have no reason to be sorry! everyone got points afterall
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