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You Are My Happiest Place

I hate leaving you
but I love coming home,
your taste still on my tounge
I still smell you on my skin
I feel you on my body

you're in my ear, you wisper softly

i love you

this is the moment-
        when nothing else exists
and it's only me, and you
i never want to leave
my happiest place

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  • psychedelicmatthew
    August 28

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    I think this is a great poem. I wouldn't change anything except maybe the last two lines, which are a little cliche and unpoetic, although there's not really a better alternative. Overall, very good.