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You Love Me

I fade into the darkness,
drunk from being in your arms.

All of my fears have been removed
for the moment
& my tears have been muted.

I wish I could persuade you to stay
here forever, repelling the bugs of despair,
from around me.

Your motive isn't questionable...you love me.

Author notes

Word bank prompt:

I used all words but decree, couldn't fit it in.

despairing, decree, drunk, fade, repel, persuade, remove, questionable, mute, wish

I think I used them correctly, if not please let me know.

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  • ShaShay
    November 5

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    How could someone leave if they love you? A question I could answer a thousand ways but none that would make sense. I like the way you used the words and can see from the write how decree wouldn't fit. It's a great poem and I congratulate you, the artist.
    Sharob


  • Mr. Kodak
    November 5

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    i love your words and how u write and your poetry never gets old to me i enjoy reading it and plan to read all of your works tonight and at least comment on the ones i like


  • daviscth silver member
    October 31

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    You did a great job with this word bank. I love the imagery as well as the emotion I felt while reading this. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

  • Dobar Dan
    October 27

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    Got No Idea - Lol

    Camr here to return the favour - I like your little poem - great flow and content - a "from the heart" write I would say - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe - Dobar dan -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- peace


  • Bright Angel
    October 26
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    awwww wonderfully done this poem expresses your love for this person


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    October 25

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    awww this is really lovely and You can definitely see the love that flows throughout your words, welldone and I see your point on the decree word xx


  • AmbiguousDesire
    October 11
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    simply lovely


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    October 10
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    Nice job. I enjoyed this. It is a nice tight poem. Great use of the word bank.

    Mike


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    September 27
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    Aww thats truly beautiful huni. In such small wordz x x


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    September 12

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    you are so good, word banks I really
    am very bad at, but you did an excellent
    piece here, good luck in the contest

    with love and blessings

    Rend


  • Arjita gupta
    September 1

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    You weaved the words from the word bank very beautifully. I liked the way the poem ended, had a lot of feeling attached to it.

    It is heartening to see that you drew something positive out of the sombre words provided.

    Good work again!


  • Topaze gold member
    August 28

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    Very well done and with the use of word bank. My best wishes.

  • goalsv
    August 27

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    Very good use of the word bank and a positive spin to the tale of wanting them to stay and not leave. Nice imagery inexplaining that they love you, and they may not realize it.

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