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My Favorite Mistake

I used to crave your touch
in the beginning.
The way you'd caress me
would remove the doubtful images
  from my mind.

You took away the blemishes in my life,
got rid of the coarse feeling of dismay
that was always there, daunting me,
discouraging me to love.

In the end, you didn't repel the bad,
you drew it in on top of me.
But you will always be,
my favorite mistake.

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Word bank prompt:
crave, beginning, blemish, coarse, caress, removed, doubtful, dismay, daunt, repel

I believe I used some form of each word.

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  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 17
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    nice use of word bank


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    November 9

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    In the end, you didn't repel the bad,
    you drew it in on top of me.
    But you will always be,
    my favorite mistake.

    Whoa!

    Amazing. Love this poem completely, thanks for entering

    - blue beauty


  • aacid1
    November 6

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    awesome

    the titles great the poems beautiful. again something i can relate to.


  • Debra A Baugh gold member
    November 2

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    i love your way of express'n your thoughts & feelings it is done with such a mellowness to it that it is so subtly done its almost unnoticeable....gr8 read.....love peace & harmony


  • fatizeh
    October 6
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    wow amazing!!!


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    September 27
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    Blemishes! Great line there girl! Loving this poem- remarkable! :-o x x


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    September 12

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    I have experienced this poem.....ahh the memories that I do and don't want to reminisce. This is very well written.Thank you for sharing.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    September 5

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    this is so encredable!!
    totally can relate to this
    piece, filled with flawless
    imagery,
    well done Poet!!

    Rend


  • toomysterious
    September 3
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    Very nicely done. Great use of the word bank. If one must make mistakes nice to have a favorite.


  • trekkergirl
    August 30

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    The ending of this one made me laugh... I mean really... You will always be my favorite mistake... how you phrase things... you really have an attitude that I can get with.

    Love to read your work as usual. thanks for sharing this.


  • KatherineAnne
    August 29

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    Wow. I absolutely love this write =)
    So many good things in this piece.
    Thank you so much for sharing this write.

    -Kati


  • Topaze gold member
    August 28
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    A wonderful write, my best wishes.

  • goalsv
    August 27

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    Nice use of the word bank. A great way to show that you still love that person and have a little humour to it.

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