Dear Gary,
You're like a stranger
That I do not know
But you say you love me
And don't want to let go
but don't expect me
To fall at your feet
I don't know you at all
So don't expect me to weep
There is no connection
I'ts you I do not know
But I have some questions
Like why'd you let me go?
Why'd you break the promise
made to my dying mother
The promise to keep us safe
From harm and all other?
Why were you abusive?
I just don't understand
Did it make you feel stronger
Or anymore like a man?
We were young and defenseless
Did it hurt you at all?
Because of your mistakes
Tracy, Clay, and I took the fall
One thing I want to know
Something only you can say
Tell me things about my mom
Before she went away
I don't remember a thing
I was to young to know
Who was she and where she went
and why'd she have to go?
Was she beautiful and strong?
Was she gentle and so sweet?
Did she light a room with her smile?
Did she worship at God's feet?
God is in control
And it was meant to be this way
I'm with the ones that love me
And I'm reminded every day
But part of me is missing
There's a hole inside of me
You could choose to fill the void
That's if you choose to be
With Love,
Booie
Author notes
I feel so miserable without you; it's almost like having you here.
Just so you know, My mom died when i was one, and my father was abusive, and i've been in the same foster home since i was 6 and i'm 17 now, and i have the opportunity to see him when i turn 18 in december.
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Wow that's really awesome. I really like the honesty behind the poetry, the pain and grief behind the words makes it a lot more than just words.
(Minor typos in the 4th and 9th stanzas.)
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That is just beautiful you was so close to make me cry and god knows even in this days thats not easy but i haven't read any thing deep and full of emotions of loss and hurt from the people who were supposed to love us and take care of us its not your only problem now days its every one's problem my father is abusive too he used to hurt me too. Till now i dont know whats was his problem but that turned me into a cold person and i admit it but you have chosen the God's path and thats just a perfect choice.
but believe one thing that your mother is in a better place coz heaven is full of people like her in this cruel world.
any way if you always write like that i would be your biggest fan .
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I know it's crazy but you can probably see alot of yourself in your mother. I am so sorry you had so much pain in your young life but you seem to be a well grounded girl.
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I was very touched by the painful honesty in your poem(and I thought it was very well written)Only you know what and when is the right choice for you, but just remember,your fathers choices don't mean you don't deserve to be loved, its about his bad choices or inadaquacies.I'm glad your faith keeps you strong.Take care.Montey
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I'm sorry for your pain and the loss of your Mom...truly; my heart goes out to you
As I stated in my contest, though; I was looking for poems about Dads and the POSITIVE aspects of Dads so I am removing this piece from my contest
Thank you, though, for sharing your heart and mine DOES go out to you! -
Sweetheart this brought tears to my eyes, but no matter what or no matter who?
Or no matter why? A father will always love his daughter.
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This is such a good piece. I am sorry for the pain you've gone through. The emotion in this was over-whelming. I can relate in a sense. Amazing piece.
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My dear .....All these questions my own son asked..(he is adopted by us) and he had the chance to meet his birth mother this spring....Alot of closure for him as he continues to talk to her.....All these questions about the injustices of why? are part of your maturing and finding yourself midst the disappointments.....This is a wonderfully transparent poem sharing your pain, and your questions as you face the future.....I will pray as December comes...M.
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I dont know which is more scarier that , thats my fathers name or in some ways i can relate. very well written write and it was so powerful. just a young kid wondering what went wrong.
God is in control
And it was meant to be this way
I'm with the ones that love me
And I'm reminded every day
- i love how through it out, you've gotten a positive outtake from it and you believe that everything happens for a reason. well done and beautiful write.
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This was really good and very moving. I liked how you did it as a letter. It was very good. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Very beautiful indeed...brought tears to my eyes. A very brave write and a step forward in your healing.
Take gentle care of yourself Holly.
Annie
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Oh Holly, this poem is so beautiful, it moved me so much, you're so strong and have such a loving and beautiful soul. Wish you all the best birl, this was just simply amazing.
Love ya Chica
~Michaela~
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My poor dear - how many awful things may happen to one person before we give up all hope - but you haven't. Don't you see that you have already answered the questions you have for your dad about your mom : where do you think you got those beautiful qualities you have inherited such as your love of God and your attempt to forgive your abusive dad ? They're from your lovely mom - it's obvious. Your poem moved me deeply. I send you all my love and best wishes, Holly. Tony x
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