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Windless Touch of Air





urging shadow looms
beyond deep corner of night
moon pen scribes the lines








scribbled notes to keys
transcribe urgent push to write
windless touch of air









nature cues the poet's mind
star-beams fire aesthetic love
words burn into page







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Author notes

Prompt: Pushed to Pull

Graphics by Aesthete2000

A contest entry

Words come alive when answered in kind.

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  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 10

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    i stopped on this one because i liked the soft impression made by your marvelous title and simply had to see more. some great turns of phrase - urging shadow and windless touch of air - very nice.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 10
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      I often water my patio garden at night,
      so I come back in with images and
      sensations wanting to make their
      way to the page!

      It was so still that night.
      I had to use the line for
      it drove the piece.
      I kept repeating it
      to myself so I wouldn't
      forget it before I got
      to the keyboard!!!

      Glad it caught your eye!

      M-C


  • Vernal Bloom
    September 7

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    I'm not a native in English write and everyday I learn new words on this Poetry Land. I really liked aesthetic love usage here, I feel you love the word aesthete yourself for choosing it as your username, Just a aesthete can observe the world beautifully and then just a poet can pen it down in a touching way and it's obvious you are both of them.
    Thank you for the lovely write here and I wish you good luck in the contest

    ~Massy~

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 7
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      Massy, I am in awe every day of those here,
      like you, whose first language is not English,
      yet write so well in this language. I applaud
      you for your accomplishments.

      And I enjoy the way you looked so carefully
      at the piece and shared your thoughts.

      M-C

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    September 5

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    Hmmmm... the graphics have been removed but the empty boxes are still there and that makes for a poor presentation of this piece sadly. I noticed this a few days ago and just thought I caught it when it was being edited and would see the final version when I was ready to judge, obviously that is not the case. On a good note, the poem is strong enough that poor presentation is not enough to keep it from being considered as a contender. I like how you used the prompt to inspire you and thought outside the box. Well done and I wish you the best of luck.

    Suzi

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 5
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      Suzi---early in the year AP changed
      its processes so judges would not
      be able to see any graphics displayed
      in an anonymous contest.
      We thought it only applied to silver and
      bronze members, but apparaently it
      bars gold, also. In case this happens
      to you again, the solution is to simply
      log out and come in as a visitor
      and then you would have been able
      to see.

      Since the contest is now over, you
      should be able to see even logged in.

      The words were swirling in my head
      as I was watering my patio container
      garden of herbs, et al, so I played
      with them in word a bit and let
      them sit. When I saw your prompt,
      I thought it to be synchonicity as
      it all came together with your
      "push to pull.'

      M-C


  • Olivias Violin
    August 29

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    'moon pen' and 'star-beams' ; I like that


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 29
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      Yes, Olivia, those expressions could
      very well be in your own collection!

      M-C


  • Summer52
    August 28
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    A very creative write.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      Summer!!! You are here!!

      How are you?

      Mumsy

      • Summer52
        August 28
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        Am fine, thanks, Mumsy

        Just arrived from work and resting here...reading some poems, I missed.
        And replying to someone who added me to his fav.

        Hope you're okay, Mumsy?

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          August 28
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          Ah, your day is over---weekend ahead--
          or didi you have to bring work home?

          I'm managing!! Figuring what works and what doesn't!

          Drawing and writing---posting more in the last week or so...

          • Summer52
            August 28
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            He he...

            How did you know that I brought with me...my twin... my work!

            Yeah...I noticed, I missed some of your writes..
            Maybe becoz, some nights, I visited, I was too tired to comment, cuz got some deadlines to finish and report... Last Wed. our Staff meeting...and it's over! So I'm resting here...for awhile...lol.

            Take care Mumsy!

            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              August 28
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              Ah, I can see that boss lady
              strapping on that work to your back
              before you step out of the office!!!
              Psychic Mumsy!

              • Summer52
                August 28

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                Ay, No, Mumsy...

                She's out-of-town...Palawan...but we were together yesterday, one of my officemates is due for retirement and we gave her a farewell party after office... Until 10pm we were together, having some fun... giving tribute to her...Tipsy...red wine and all that, party! Hah!

                I have a backlog...so need to bring work...


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    August 27

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    Ahhhh..... Natures metaphor on the creeping, sneaking, ebb and flow of creativity lurking in the secret place of discovery....our universal imagination- the birth place of the next creation.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      Hah! Love your word choice---
      "creeping, sneaking" in
      "the secret place of discovery."
      Sounds like a variation of what
      you described in your last piece,
      but rather than the frantic chasing,
      seeking out the hidden, sneaking
      character from its lair---to win the game.

      And that may be the way of writing,
      coaxing out the creeping thoughts--
      at the times they don't explode
      upon the page!

      Nice to see you here, T-D!

      M-C


  • arafura gold member
    August 27

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    I love your interpretation of this intriguing prompt! Great work!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      Intriquing, yes---so much so at first
      I turned away from the challenge,
      then saw it for inspiration!

      Thank you, John.

      M-C


  • Denerica
    August 27

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    Celestrial images are so beautiful...and your words and pics always are too. Everyting created is a word that speaks...clever. Excellent. Blessings.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      Love that thought---not only
      the printed word that speaks
      but the drawn lines as well!

      Thank you, Denise, for seeing that.

      M-C

  • Yemassee gold member
    August 27
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    How does one get pushed to pull? And what are they pulling and do I want to know?

    Ah, I have never felt a connection to the solar system and it has never beamed me any message, especially about writing, but if it had, I'm sure it would have encouraged me to eat more bacon or potato chips but not to write. I have faith my lucky stars care more about my taste buds than my writing skills.

    I like the color variations in the graphics, showing the process of creativity and writing.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      Ah, the solar sytem fears messing with the great Yem,
      knowing what "Shocking Tales of Horror" can be concocted
      in that Yemish brain.

      But I might just have a chat with Venus to beam you some
      broccoli and cauliflower to complement the bacon and the chips!!

      When I first saw the prompt, I hmmmmmmd and clicked away,
      but then the thought kept buzzing in my head---a gentle shove
      or outright nudge to "pull" that idea from the head. The idea
      does not just fall out, full-born, but needs some nurturing
      and crafting. the nudge may come in many forms, the pull
      our own desire to see it complete, from giimmer to an entity
      all its own, living breathing fiction or serious or silly verse.

      Thank you for noticing the graphics, as always.
      At first I thought to add color by hand,
      for I invisioned the extensions as flames,
      words burning into the page. But then
      I saw they could also be the touch of soft air,
      the touchless push that is needed or even
      winged-like shapes. And then the play began!

      Thank you, Captain, my Captain!
      (Attempting to get in pirate mode)

      M-C

      • Yemassee gold member
        August 28
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        I like veggies too, so no problem. I'll just put a nice creamy and fatty cheese sauce on top of them, lol

        Arrgghh, if me don't get enough citrus me'll be a scurvy dog matey, lol

        Yeah, I should be a pirate.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          August 28
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          Or some thick with dripping strings melted low fat mozarella!
          Garden tomatoes sliced on the side.
          On the pirate deck, pots of tomatoes
          chained to the cabin!

          The arrgghhhiest pirate of them all.
          The group would surely welcome such a wit!

          • Yemassee gold member
            August 28
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            As you saw, groups don't like me. I'm best left as a free agent to move about where there is a void that needs to be filled.

            Low fat Mozzarella? Madam, for suggesting that Captain Peg leg should make you walk the plank! Always whole milk, always! I have not been at see so long that I can't appreciate real cheese!

            Mozzarella, now I want pizza! lol I'm never going to be thin am I. lol

            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              August 28

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              Mozarella is natuarally low fat compared to cheddar.
              And just as yummy.

              What's really yucky is so-called low fat cheese that doesn't
              melt under the broiler, but just blackens. Will never venture
              that way again!!

              A free-lance pirate? Sounds perfect for you!!!

              From Wi, I salute full fat cheese!!
              But Mozarella made with part skim milk is perfect.

              Put chunks in with my concoction of mostacolli,
              tomatoes, oniion, celery, mushrooms, red and green peppers,
              my first hot pepper, olive oil and lots of fresh herbs. Yummmmm...some still on the stove---want some?
              (Late, late supper---another altercation with the light flash, amber spotlights reflecting on the hose spray!---and then the light in the freezer. Danger lurks everywhere. Had to hide out in the dark a while!!)

              • Yemassee gold member
                August 28

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                mostacolli

                Never had it but I know I like it! Want some? I want it all. I think you could cook 24 hours a day and you sill wouldn't get ahead of me, lol

                • Aesthete2000 gold member
                  August 28
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                  Lots of multi-ingredient salad on the side
                  to keep you busy chewing---burning pirate calories!

                  This food discussion does relate to the topic on the page---cooking prompted by being hungry, or preparing a meal to share with a friend-----
                  writing prompted by a hunger to create, to share the
                  finsihed product with a good freind/s.

                  Mostacolli--thick short pieces--like huge spaghetti cut in pieces.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    August 27

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    You are in a truly writing mood!
    Those are very nice verses, although I never really feel the urgent push to write, I do know that for many that is how it works.
    When the words don't come easily, I read instead and wait.
    Windless touch, lovely expression.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 28
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      And your reading motivates as well, not only you,
      but the others you inspire.

      I have found that sitting---writing, drawing is good,
      whereas flying around taxes the once never-ending stamina,
      which has been reduced to a small flash!!!

      And then there is that touch--that little urge to put line to paper,
      to tap the keys, just so---when complete--I can stare at the page
      and enjoy what didn't exist an hour or so before.

      All tempered by curiousity, wanting to see
      what is flitting about in my imagianation.

      Thank you, Mari, queen of the ku!

      M-C


  • pixiestix gold member
    August 27
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    Pulling from nature inspiration aligning words and art into a burning configuration layering into poetry.

    I love the title "Windless Touch of Air" and where it leads my mind to thinking of more of a sense, the intangible presence of something. We feel it. We know when it's there.

    Wonderful piece, Aes.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 27
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      Suzi's prompt of "pushed to pull"
      brought to mind that subtle
      touch upon the mind,
      within the heart,
      tp create anew,
      for it is there,
      the next piece,
      awaiting release!

      And quick before it's lost---
      as you know so well.
      I stil hear those silent screams!!
      I synpathize!

      thank you, pix,

      Aes

      • pixiestix gold member
        August 27

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        Yes, still very fresh and I might just scream again. lol

        I can see each piece, waiting their turn in a queue of sorts, a progression of thought or for when inspiration stikes and pushes them to the front of the line.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          August 27
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          I am always sorry for the ones
          that push ahead in the line
          and fill the brain as sleep desends
          for they are doomed to be lost
          when awake again!!!!

          Breathe and breathe again.
          It will never be the same,
          but new inspiration will replace
          what might have been.
          Now you will remember
          to hit save repeatedly.
          I learned the hard way, too!!!!1


  • davidb7869 silver member
    August 27

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    another nice one....describes how people and write/draw material on sites such as AP....btw what program do you use to make those designs???.and the second part to 'backup qb' is up....

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 27
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      Wow, i just hit the keys here--and there you are!

      I'll be right over---been waiting for it to appear!!

      The original pen drawing I made is at the top,
      with the edge added in Photobucket,
      where I experimented with various
      effects to get the colored results
      that follow down the page.
      It's a matter of layering, as with
      layers of paint to get the
      desired effect.

      thank you for your interest,

      M-C

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