I think it was a month ago that I
Was standing at that precipice in tears
And sudden winds of change began to dry
My cheeks and whisk away my deepest fears.
I stopped and breathed as if I never had
And felt refreshed. I knew that it drew near -
The change that I desired, that drove me mad.
It was that burning wish which led me here;
Here sitting underneath the purple sky
And looking up in wonder at the stars,
Here knowing I do not need wings to fly,
Here knowing I can rise above my scars.
Here without doubt, calm, certain breezes blowing.
Here unafraid, here confident, here... knowing.
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You are really good at writing sonnets. Are there any other formal formats that you've used? Villanelles, ballads or the like? I'd love to read some if you have.
My favorite stanza was number 3. This poem is very vague and airy in its subject, but that is appropriate I suppose, as thought seems to be the central focus.
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I used to write a lot of "ballads" but I'm sure if I went back to them now I'd find the rhythm severely flawed. I have a couple of ideas for new ones though, it's just a matter of having the time to really think them out and write them out. I like to write an occasional triolet too, but the topic has to be right for me otherwise I think the repetition gets annoying. I think I've only attempted one villanelle EVER, though I'd like to write a really good one that's another one where I feel the subject has to be right for the repetition to work well. That is a form that I do enjoy reading though.
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Ah, I see. Thanks for the reply! If you've never read Do Not Go Gentle into that Good Night, it's one of my favorite villanelles. Very well done. And he even rhymes, which isn't a requirement for the form!
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loved this full of want and hope damn fine work thanks for sharing impressed
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relate to this poem. I'm still standing at the precipice though. I really like the hopeful ending:
"Here knowing I do not need wings to fly,
Here knowing I can rise above my scars.
Here without doubt, calm, certain breezes blowing.
Here unafraid, here confident, here... knowing."
thanks
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It may get worse before it gets better, but if you can hang on... it will get better.
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A wonderful sonnet! Positive and uplifting! A great piece
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A beautiful Sonnet of new and refreshing perspective of life leaving the oppression and depression behind. This is a happy, joyful poem of hope and peace. Thanks for sharing.
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Excellent, excellent, excellent!! A fine, crisp, sharp and beautiful sonnet--but then we expect nothing less from you magical pen!!!
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I rather like how the final word is the title of this - the word 'Knowledge' sparks interest within from a title then placed so well in a sonnet of this power, well it is all works perfectly
Openly emotional, there are hints of dark days but the final flush gives hope and reassurance
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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hey sonnet-eer
hehe...nice! Perfect flow and rhyme and awesome visuals/poetic phrase. I like the use of enjambment ... And the reiteration in S3 sounds very good. Very well-written, I like it!
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Wow! You certianly got my attention in this sonnet, it feels like a victory song, the shackles of depression have been lifted and new hope is realized. I like the positive thrust of this poem, a delight to read and ponder.
Brother Dennis
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A lovely free flowing sonett, but I would think on change to stood standing as it stops that beautiful flow, maby try (while) standing, Stanza three was favourite for me. Two fine last lines and excellent rhyme.
check line thirteen I get eleven sylables?
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Yes, the last couplet does have a eleven.
I can't believe I put it up as "stood standing!" Thanks.
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Bandit's reading list
A nicely written,breezy,flowing poem,rhymes well just one small gramatical error
the use of "stood" and "standing" together otherwise an excellent write
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What on earth? How did I post it like that? Thanks for pointing it out!
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This sonnet is a pure joy to recite aloud. Few sonnets have a flow this perfectly penned and that adds to the wonderful imagery that you have painted. This poem puts the reader right in the scene and does it with emotion. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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Amazing
It made me wish I was there also, really.
Where is this place? This place underneath the purple sky? I want to be the one without doubt, calm, unafraid, confident, knowing. I really enjoyed this poem a lot in fact I think you have a great talent. At first glance I thought it might be too short but you addressed atmosphere and mood very well. Pat yourself on the back for this one.
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It's right in my backyard, sitting with my two dogs at midnight, after giving notice to my current employers and accepting a better job.
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