Pretty night she strolls the lonely sky
cuddling stars her perpetual shiny friends
city life cruelly ignores her slumber cry
holding umbrella to guard tears that don’t end
Alone she lives without a glimpse of sun
storm she calls upon when she demands
throne of darkness webs earth for evil fun
thunderstorm whips life on her command
Author notes
Prompt: Alone
Lento consists of two quatrains with a fixed rhyme scheme of abcb, defe. The second and fourth lines of each stanza must rhyme. To take it a step further, try
rhyming the first and third lines as well as the second and fourth lines of each stanza in this rhyming pattern: abab, cdcd. The FIRST words of each verse should rhyme. this is the hard part!
There is no fixed syllable structure to the Lento, but
keeping a good, flowing rhythm is recommend
A contest entry
- One Word Prompt by Diminished Capacity.
550 points, ended August 27, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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thunderstorms are also, confined to one's feelings, and most probably beyond a hill which only hides the true story in the tale. I sense a deep sombre, it's almost frightening to the extent you want to help. In this case, the umbrella takes the place of the hill, you can get on nicely thank you,
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Beautifully done, I've never come across this form before... reading author notes, it seems pretty hard format, especially rhyming of the the first words of each line... and the content of the poem is equally impressive...
well done winning a bronze...
mina
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This seems much more complicated than you have made >seems you had no trouble producing a wonderful poem using this form I congratulate you on your bronze
Excellent
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I love the rhyme scheme in this, and you did a wonderful job with the prompt. Thank you so much for entering.
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