Water slowly glistering down your body
I follow a thirst that cannot be denied
I hunger for the silkiness and wetness
Hidden beneath the innocence of your
Soul, shimmering and waning in the cool mist
The jealousy and rage enclosed toward the rain
While you taunt and lure me unexpectedly
I wish I could be the rain, enveloped in your charm
Being as bold as to touch you, stroke you gently
The battle between the Angels crying and angry
Roars of the Gods doesn’t cool the blazing flame
Flickering as raindrop touches our hidden spots in a
Shameless caress—there’s only one thing I long to be
To be the rain and love in an open adoration
A contest entry
- Sensual Love In The Rain. by Poetryintheblood.
900 points, ended September 2, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
how do you feel?
Comments
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Very well done, I like it. I did however notice a couple of typo's you might want to address.
L1: glistering=glistening
L8: "envelop" in your charm= enveloped/enveloping?
L12: touches= touch or touched
Best of luck to you... Scott
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Thanks for the notice! For the first one, glistering is the correct word I wanted.. causes a little pause with the 'r' when one says it.
The envelop has been changed to enveloped...
I'm going to keep 'touches' but will remove the s from raindrops...
thanks!
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