| Je perds mon esprit à chaque fois tu me regardes
avec tes yeux
tellement profonds
une personne peut se perdre dans les.|
When only enticing words
pour out of your mouth,
I melt as quickly
as my heart did
when it first saw you.
This was your plan all along…
and now that you’ve won me,
and torn my heart in two
you lean in for the kill…
“I will be there,
pretending.
I'll make you think
I care.
Until the time
is right.
To rip from you,
all your friends.
And eventually,
leave you.
All alone.”
Which will just be a repeat
of all the pain you've caused me.
Nothing different;
you carry me around in a circle.
You bewitch me with your words
and seduce me with your kindness....
can it possibly get worse?
I think it can...
Author notes
The quote that is the 4th stanza came from my friend who,upon reading one of my poems, replied with that short poem. The last stanza is my reply to his comment.
I loved how it sounded, and added it into my new poem. Hope u enjoy!
The first stanza translates to
| I lose my mind every time that you look at me
with your eyes,
so deep
a person can get lost in them.|
Honest criticisms please!
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Wonderful
The story of love as it is. As beautiful as it is painful at times.
A few suggestions though. The background is a nice but it conflicts with the text colour, so you may consider changing one or the other. I personally thought it was a little off putting to see the first stanza in French.
Overall a very good write.
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Very powerful
This is great!
"I melt as quickly, as my heart did, when it first saw you." Awesome!
Great write, keep it up
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I love the quote...makes me think of my bf
I love the poem, very beautiful and yet painful
Good job = )
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"you carry me around in a circle" wish I had written that line. beautiful and soulful poem.
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Wow amazing
Bravo
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