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Why???

Why must I smile,
Why must I grin,
Why do I have to go the extra mile,
When you're the one who'll always win,
You look at me and never see,
The person I could truly be.

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oy, well, I kinda like it   I cant take all the credit, we did this for vocal (but its not a song)  I think its pretty good for 10 minutes w/ 5 people....
Written April 1st, 2004

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  • Infereptious
    April 9, 2004
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    HAH!!! I LOVE YOU, this is exactly y i need input! yay! thaank you wheezyanna!!!!!!!!!!!!
    ~Infer~


  • wheezyanna
    April 9, 2004
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    I like this. If you change the 4th line to read "When you're the one who'll always win" it will fix the rhyme without losing the meaning.

  • Diane Wehi
    April 2, 2004
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    Right on the button for me. How many times I have been looked over instead people at the inner self. I loved it short and powerful.Way to go.


  • BleedingBlack
    April 1, 2004
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    The ryhmes actually aren't too bad. I like this one. Nice work!

  • Infereptious
    April 1, 2004
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    yeah, they didn't really for me either, but it was as close as we could get...

  • InvisibleSyko
    April 1, 2004
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    Its good, the Rhyme Grin and Wins, dont really work for me, but its good.. keep it up!

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