Bodies bound in razor laced chains...
Bonded to plate metal, sanity this place drains...
Their heads symmetrically turned away...
Eyes untouched to the horrors displayed...
Rust meets blood, upon the walls...
The decay embraced water, under the floor it crawls...
Decomposing heads line the walls in hallways...
Over their faces, the rot dismal, intently plays...
Broken away chain link, eaten hole of corrosion...
Blood slowly leaks down the walls...
Running over the rust in a revolting erosion...
The sheer beauty, shinning from these halls...
Mobiles of flesh hang delightfully...
Chunks of muscle and gore...
With wire strung together beautifully...
Warming and soothing to the core...
Iron spikes, poking up unforgiving at angle...
From some of their points, ripped skin dangles...
Metal floor clanking beneath your feet...
Waiting for you, gruesome countenance meets...
Pulsing flesh, behind filth touched metal screens...
Into your mind, terror is flung...
The smell of blood and rust seeps into your lungs...
Much ghastly allure still unforeseen...
My heart here is comforted and warmed...
By the macabre in all its matter and form.
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A contest entry
- Prewrites everyone wins by Ami.
575 points, ended September 7, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow. this is dark, really dark.
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Wow, the images i got after reading this.
It was GREAT!
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After reading through a few of the poems in the macabre section, it seems like you're the only one who has this down. Great poem.
x.
onyx wings
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"Mobiles of flesh hang delightfully...
Chunks of muscle and gore..."
Wow! This was amazing, as much as it was scary as much I liked it. It reminded me of this movie 'Silent Hill'. Amazing pictures you've painted, painful, bloody and dark yet something deeper was there beneath all the blood and torn flesh. Very well penned.
Love
~Noor
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Beautiful imagery, it reminds me of some chaos twisted hell. Rhyme and meter are good and thus the poem flows well, much like fresh blood dripping from a newly opened wound. The last two lines are a brilliant finish, they add that personal dimension to the poem.
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For some reason, I craved horror before returning to work after a long weekend. This is where I came for that and once again, you've more than excelled. So chilling, yet you make it so appealing. Never a wasted trip to visit your page.
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I love how you end this, the contrast of being comforted by all the blood and gore, it really made this work for me. This poem feels almost like you're giving a tour of your house in one of those parade of homes things (this is my thumbscrews room, this is my disemboweling room, this is my decapitation room
). Anyway, I loved it, very creative.
~lost
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Dark, and great Macabre write. You do great work at this sort of genre. I really like this part
Iron spikes, poking up unforgiving at angle...
From some of their points, ripped skin dangles...
Metal floor clanking beneath your feet...
Waiting for you, gruesome countenance meets...
Leaves a lot to let the mind imagine and that's what it's all about. Letting the mind go crazy . Great details. Bravo to you!
Cat
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Electrified blood n guts !!
You are so very good at these writes
KUDOS
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wow bro,this is one of the best things ive ever read,the darkness reaches out through the words,damn,this is just awesome
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This is deliciously dark and very painful. I found it spellbinding as no one writes in the dark genre like you. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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You have painted quite the picture...
Mobiles of flesh hang delightfully...
Chunks of muscle and gore...
With wire strung together beautifully...
Warming and soothing to the core...
You definitely know how to make things grossly good. -
Ewwwwwwww.
No, seriously, ew. That means you did a brutal and beautiful job with the imagery.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Loving the imagery I'm getting with this piece, Very dark and Gory, just the way I like em. Great write.
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how do you think of the words to use like that? i get images that are so disturbing... must mean it's good. and here i am before i go to bed reading this again. lol... shiver
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you are absolutely magical.. you and only you make it so real.. I feel your pain and ache for you and want to take it for you.
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