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[ emerging red ]

emerging red
over crystal blue
sailor's warning

Author notes

This is a takeoff of the old adage:
"red sky at night
sailor's delight
red sky at morning
sailors take warniing"

A contest entry

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  • Macsword
    September 14

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    Very fine...

    Congrats on the HM. There was a great deal of competition in this contest and you should be proud of a solid piece. Good work poet.


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    September 7
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    Yup!

    Warning sign for sure! Great Ku. Congrats on the HM.


  • azure85 gold member
    September 7

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    Oh, the proverb brought to life in your haiku. A great use of color to describe the scene and an excellent use of the traditional adage. Thank you so much!