sexless:
always crave it;
feeling one might combust
without hot hole hugging manhood--
self-sex.
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yeah, i rocked the cinquain.
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A contest entry
- Sing To Me In Cinquain by Allyce May.
1500 points, ended September 15, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Self -gratification... You gotta love it.
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Oi, made it to your entry
I think one of the most difficult things to achieve while writing a cinquain is conveying meaning, and doing so thoroughly. I've noticed many of the cinquains I've read have poetic qualities such as imagery and rhythm, but are often evasive or too straightforward. They fall short because there are either not enough syllables to get the point across OR there are words shoved in for the sake of it. You've found the balance. You also probably did it without trying 
Anyway, I did not want that to go unnoticed. Yes, there is humorous undertones to this poem, but the way each line relates to the next is impressive nonetheless and the last line, which can be seriously lacking, gives purpose to the rest of the piece. You know I would rip this if I could, but I can't. So, credit where credit is due
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Wow... form! Unexpected. Otherwise I'm not sure what to say... comes off as analytical. Which is cool.
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Yeah...and I also just can't imagine that you're really ever "sexless". I'm sure you have a constant parade of women throwing themselves at you.
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i'm picky.
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well that's a good thing, lol
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LMAO!
Taking the world by storm... errr... by sex, I mean.
You are the absolute KING of inappropriate.
I'd say this is gold. Just a hunch.
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I like this form of poetry., and you have done a great job here to get everything you need to into the poem.
well done. great job!
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you rocked it for sure, Matt - you hot-rocked it (or should i rather say "hot-holed" it). so great to see you writing a cinquain too and see it sexed-up like this. great work!
~ Nicolette
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haha i was being sarcastic when I said I rocked it but glad you don't think I completely butchered the form. thanks, nicolette
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w00t!!!
Damn, you sure did. Best of luck in the contest, friend.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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ya dirty bird. lol.
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hehehehe matty's feeling frisky huh?!
tugga-tugga-tugga-tugga-tugga... tugga-tugga-tugga-tugga-tugga
good luck in the contest xx
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LMAO..."Sexless," lol, that''l be the day
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*faints laughing....cinquain always makes me think soft...er...now I might have to rethink it lol C
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Celibacy, huh. Weiiiird.
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very weird, indeed lol
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lol... seems not the only thing you're rockin'. i was going to say she wasn't allowing erotica because i saw her contest earlier, but i see it's been adjusted
glad to see you trying out form. see? you can do anything when you put your mind to it, or have the proper incentive.
and i literally laughed reading this. good one.
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Depressing as it is...i can certainly relate to this one...more then id like to admit...
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would read great without the over use of puncuation (lose them all), the line breaks speak for themselves .... i liked this ... 2nd line 4s could have been a great 3rd worded different and add a great throw off 2nd line 2s power word.
and i am sorry for offering sugestions, PerVitious told me that when i do that i am being "tacky" and "showing-off" ...
great piece m8 ... always love your words
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thanks, just wrote this quick at work... i'll take a look at it when i get home and look over your suggestions.
I don't find it tacky, your advice tends to hold merit.
cheers
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