My thoughts are my own,
Yet they speak for themselves.
For it is through my pen
When my minds eye is closed
And the thoughts are not racing,
That my pen goes a-pacing.
I pay no mind,
To the paper,
To the time.
I don't care if it does rhyme,
For it is whatever comes out
That becomes mine.
I go back from the end,
after the last word
Has been writ,
And read, for myself,
Aloud
To see what my heart has made
Proud.
My thoughts,
They speak for themselves,
From whence my heart
It delves,
And then in ink
The page fills
And that is when it becomes
My Thrill!
Author notes
Option 2: quote inspired
Sara Teasdale, Born August 1884, wrote What Do I Care? in 1910. This quote is from that poem:
For my mind is proud and strong enough to be silent,
It is my heart that makes my songs, not I.
A contest entry
- August New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended September 6, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
I think this fits in just fine with the quote you have chosen. A nice set of thoughts here, well done.
Welcome toAP and good luck
Storm
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welcome to allpoetry
This fits quite well with the quote.
I especially liked the last eight lines.
Nice job.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
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Welcome to Allpoetry
You seem to have been really inspired and ur words speak that out, loud and bold!!!
thank you for part in the contest. Good luck..
Cheers,
Archana
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welcome to all poetry
That's what you have to do, just get lost in your thought, your ink, your flow...very nice take on the prompt
♥
whisper
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Welcome to All Poetry~~
In content, I like the self-establishment this represents.
Poetry is really supposed to come from a strong desire to project something that is innermost at the risk of being rejected. And you've done so here.
Well executed with your muse. I just love the idea.
*Suggestions*
Title might need a punctuation after "thoughts", such as a comma.
Were this mine, I would give this glory by 'left aligning' the format. Why? Because, if there are inconsistent or irregular rhyme and meter schemes, it reads with the mystique you might have intended. This, being a more modern version of 'blank verse' rhymes with some rhythm. And , if anything, contemporary writing won't use all the capitals at the beginnings. ( Try it... you might like it...)
Oopsie: "mind's eye" should replace minds eye" as possessive case.
If you would like a "Level 2" Critique, please let me know as this one caught my eye.
If/ when you should edit, please reply to this comment so we can give it another lookie. Thank you so much for your entry. Warmly, CookieZeal
as from me in content...
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