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Disappointment

I could be a better person.
He speaks of his concerns and I wonder:
what would I do if positions were reversed?

I hate to disappoint him.
It’s not related to him, this obsession of mine
with lemon-colored nectar that seems to make all right with the world.

I know it’s not healthy.  I know this
and when he confronts me, I hear him.  I listen.
I do.  But when I tell him that, it seems to make things worse --

perhaps because I do not promise
what I am unable fulfill right now;
that which he most wants to hear and see.

What would I do if positions were reversed?
I do not know.  But I do know that I love him
and that he loves me.

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  • ocerus
    August 29

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    This sounds like an alcoholic I know. He throws money away like crazy. He can also be violent and profane. He was caught driving drunk and spent 1 year in the slammer. I like this poem because it showcases your friend nicely with not much sparing "crapola."