When life brings me down,
I know who I can run to.
She's mt best friend. I
can't ask for anyone better.
No one can ever replace her.
When I cried my tears she
was there to wipe them away.
When I sat alone she came in and
asked what was wrong. I'd say nothing
but you know I'm lying
When I needed a hug you
were there. When all I needed
was an "I love you" you were there.
You're the one I tell my secrets to.
You're my mum. I love you
more and more each day.
She's not just my mum. She's
my best friend.
Author notes
This poem is deadicated to my mum
I love her so much. This poem is actually
part of a letter I wrote by hand so forgive
me if it doesn't sound good.
She cutter: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4608223 (First poem)
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This is a lovely thought. I am best friends with my daddy.. my mum and i are getting a lot better.. beautiful write. Its perfect, its ur thoughts, to ur mummy. That's all that matters. :-)
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You are unbeleivably lucky to have that relationship with your mother.
I actually like the way it sounds. I thought it was the most effective way you could have put it. -
Another nice write :] Comparing this to your 1st write, I like that your style has stayed similar; you still have simple wording and strong emotions. You have also improved your writing since your 1st AP entry, so congrats on that. Great job with this poem.
Thanks for entering, & good luck in the contest
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nice and i like this cause i feel the same way about my mum and its nice how you put it all together
so we all can read it and get the real meaning. Mums are so special in all that they do and they know how to be a little of both , a mother and a friend. The best listeners too and really great advice, thank was very enjoyable and , will be sure to check out more of your work.
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Thanks, and good luck
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aww... sis this super sweet and nice
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aww,,, mum^^
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"I'd say nothing but you know I'm lying"....ah when someone knows you're lying you can trust them :-)
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Awe.
This was sweet.
Your mother will adore this.
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i like it its beautifully written and shows how your mom can be a mom but how she's also your best friend...good job!!!
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