Somber
tones echo throug the corridor.
Listen here without fear
as words are heard
no more.
Darkened
symphony cry to me once more.
Wail to me for I see
a heart of mine
that tore.
Be gone
from me you deep harmonic stain,
now a hole in my soul,
the very stroke
of pain.
Silence you broke.
A goal that rings a toll
the final note in the refrain
held long.
The clash
of metal sound,
a sign of tempo time,
leading this unsung melody
beat bound.
Plucked strings
scream forever,
in ears that hear no tears,
emotion played by solo hands
for her.
Somber
symphony cry to me once more
of pain
leading this unsung melody
for her
Author notes
Photo: Violinist
SPQR
This is a Reverse Butterfly Garland Cinquain...(I combined a few of the forms into one.)
First two stanzas are Reverse Cinquains followed by a Butterfly Cinquain then two Crapsey Cinquains ending with the Garland Stanza of Stanza 1 Line 1, Stanza 2 Line 2, Stanza 3 Line 5, Stanza 4, Line 4, and Stanza 5 Line 5.
I may have it wrong but this is my first attempt at this.
It was originally meant to be just a Garland Cinquain which I discarded by adding the Butterfly Cinquain.
A contest entry
- Looking for dark poetry (List of prompts) by Symphony.of.Silence.
650 points, ended September 7, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Form Poetry --- II by rinzurajan.
700 points, ended November 1, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please give me suggestions on what I could do to make this better. I will reward those to whoever asks and critiques with suggestions I can work with. And Thank you for reading.
Comments
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thats an intelligent way of having written this one...
good luck -
this was very interesting, I have never seen a poem structured in this way, it was new, fresh even. I enjoyed this write and the picture your wrote for really spoke to me through this piece. Good luck in my contest friend!
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