Sitting in the drive through lane,
I’ve been waiting way too long.
The waitress messed my order up,
And all my food is wrong.
The line at the grocery store,
Is long and makes me wait.
I wish they would hurry up,
For my TV show I’m late.
I need my food fast and right,
No time for all this waiting.
I must move through this world,
As if I’m always skating.
Then one day I’m swept away,
To a place I’ve never been.
It is then I came to realize,
My impatience is a sin.
People were standing in a line,
Looking weak and full of strain,
Waiting for so many hours,
For just a sack of grain.
They looked at me with sad eyes,
And a stare that was so sad.
Because sitting there at my feet,
Was trash from the food I had.
I wanted to run and hide my face,
Or even push the eject button.
As it became so clear to me,
I had become a selfish glutton.
A contest entry
- Let Yourself Go by GinryuStargazer.
800 points, ended August 28, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh wow. This is another great write from you! You do such a good job expressing thoughts like this.
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Oh my this is a winner for sure. Oh what a humble poem for all to read my dear friend. This was so good for me to read because I at times get so impatient. I think this poem is excellent for all eyes and hearts to read upon. You make this world a better place just by expressing your wisdom with such excellently written poetry. The rhyme, rhythm and flow as well as imagery and emotion, it's all there. Thank you so much for sharing your gift to write poetry with me. Best wishes in the contest.
Wishing You Many Blessings Always,
Much Love,
Kelle Marie
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Soul searching write....Humbling, with such a message, bro....You are a powerful writer of rhyme and conscience...
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i like this. it tells it like it is. great rhythm and rhyme, wonderful imagery. thank you for sharing your amazing talent with us. keep writing poeT! God bless you always
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Ooo this is impactful, endearing and so wrapped in reality...thanks for the needed jolt
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I Loved how this flowed, first of all.. and the message was extremely powerful. I Loved it. I'm actually going to share this with some of my friends, if you don't mind.
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Thank, glad you lked it. Feel free to share with anyone.
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This should be read by all, because our complaining is so sad, I guess we should all look around clearly and see before we complain, so many blessing and those who appear to have so little too have blessing that go unseen
I love, love the awareness in your write
GREAT SHOUT OUT
excellent rhyme
God bless you my friend...
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