Passionate screams of agony
Slashing through the night air
Another dead, another gone
Hearing their pain, my pain
Even the most soothing music
is like shards of glass in my ears
When does this life have meaning?
Which can end so abruptly?
So full of hate and fear
Dark enemies everywhere
Seeking your utter demise
Their Touch is devouring
Even the soft hair of a lover
has no meaning to my numb fingers
Who are the enemies?
What is the evil?
They are winning,
these foes, these masters
of despair and sorrow
I can Taste my defeat
Like bile rising from my stomach
Completely coating my tongue
Why can't I stop them?
Where are they hiding?
Years of searching and seeking
For my Greatest Of Foes
At last I know the truth
Their Scent is consuming
so not even the sweetest flower
Can be pleasant to my nose
He was inside me the whole time
This unstoppable enemy
Knowing your enemy is the answer
Unmasking him before you
Removing fear of the unknown
For the first time he is in my Sight
Where he was hiding all the time
Has been revealed to my eyes
Myself...
The conqueror of the senses
Hearing, Touch, Taste, Scent, Sight
The ruler of them all
My brain is pulsing
With my twisted thoughts racing
True mental anguish
But that is not enough,
No, not enough for him
Pain inflicted by the senses;
Not nearly intense enough
More misery he must cause
Mental suffocation he brings
The mind screaming for release
You can't fight yourself
How do you defeat the greatest enemy you've ever faced?
You can't.
He is the Perfect Enemy.
Author notes
K n i g h t O f T h e R o s e
Comments
1 - 26 of 26
-
wow... what made you have such thoughts? now that I think, you are actually so right. There are different levels of enmity and opposition we face in the life, but where lies the greatest danger? It is when you yourself are opposed to yourself... The situation which in its mildest sense is called dilemma... and when it happens at a grater level, there is no respite.
You have done a great portrayal of this simple, yet complex fact. Great use of images and situations that stir the imagination.... I'd give this poem a full 5 stars if it were possible but for now I just have a few applauses.....
..............................
-
What brought these thoughts to your beautiful mind.. I do not know . I hope and pray the sadness and time has passed . That you are feeling better. How well you write my friend .
-
-
Thank you
I'm glad you liked it. I am feeling better. Thank you
-Steve-
-
-
It seems to me like Death is the Perfect Enemy, or rather the fact that one day, we all will die. But try to look at it as just a ride home, rather than the end of all things. Your life that you live will only be lost if you don't live it happily. This is a really good poem, and I'm glad I read it. Keep it up because I said so.
Vhoori
-
-
Thank you
-Steve-
-
-
You are your own enemy? Wow. Well, now wow. What a strong thought and something that I thinkI can relate with on so many levels. After I got sick a such, and had post traumatic stress disoder, I was in group therpy. Within group therapy, we were given a list of charasteristics. All were positive, and we had..HAD to select 10 that described us. No one wanted to pick them, since they were positive. But since I had no choice, I said i was a good listener, funny, caring, intelligent, ect. A few weeks later, we were given three different lists, each with a collection of words from that same word bank, and one list was the one that we chose. My therapist said pick a list of words that describes the person you'd want to be friends with. And we all picked the list we had written. Weird eh?!?! It was more so to prove to us that we aren't as fucked up as we all think we are. It didn't really work, just proves I like people that are like me but. wow that was a long tangent. But, this is beautiful, and scary and sadly penned, but i loved it. Nicely done Steve!
ej -
what vivid imagery holy smokes! I can taste your words, you're that good.
And of course the message is strong and well told.
We are the perfect ennemy.
The challenge is trying to be your own best friend. Harder than it sounds.
nicely done
Kat
-
-
I'm glad you liked it and yes being your own friend is a real challenge
-Steve-
-
-
well, the thing of it is...you don't need to impress this friend of yours. Your poetry is for YOU, not them. You write it for YOU, not anyone else. Poetry is supposed to be to express YOUR feelings, not theirs. If they don't like it, who cares? I think it's a wonderful poem, and keep up the awesome work. Don't worry abotu that other person. It's all you!! And there's nothing wrong with this poem at all.
-
-
Thank you
-
-
This is just excellently done !
Truley impressed, muffin dear ^^
-
-
Thank you
-
-
One of the greatest challenges to us in life is to know ourselves and understand that person inside. The next step, make that enemy your friend. Something Im working on still at the age of 43. Wonderfully written.
-
-
Thank you
-
Thank you
-
-
Wow...
I am speechless
-
-
is that a good thing?
-
-
Yes.
-
-
Good. Just making sure one of my friends really doesn't like it and I'm trying to figure out what's wrong with it.
-
-
-
-
better.. better.. i really like
"I can taste my defeat
Like bile rising from my stomach
Completely coating my tongue"
^^in fact i love that part. but overall nice write
-
-
Thank you I'm glad you liked the additions
-
-
this is excellent steve. love it... kinda sad.. but yeah... kinda is the greatest enemy... yourself, can relate. :/
-
-
I thought you might be able to relate Thank you for your comment
-Steve-
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 26 of 26
