Sweet lies, I can't help but believe you.
Your words leave me breathless,
I love how you sugar coat the bitter truth.
I’ve fallen in, I’m obsessed.
Author notes
was only allowed to use 27 words but I will most likely turn this into a lyric after the contest 
A contest entry
- Quickie! Everyone wins points! by Blue-Rose Beauty.
490 points, ended August 26, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie Poems that won a trophy by Not-The-Sun.
550 points, ended September 6, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
True like all my lyrics good or bad?
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Great poem here! We are all guilty of wanting to hear something other than the truth and not wanting to be near the truth. Pour me some sugar. I admit to hating the truth. Keep writing!
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Nice
Very well said. Some times it often happens that we know that the person is lying some how but still we ignore.
A very well expressed poem.
Great job and keep on writing such short and great poems.
Stay happy
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Congrats on the hm, it was well deserved. I think you did a great job with the prompt, and with only having 27 words...this is awesome. Keep entering contests like this, it will give you practice..and practice always makes perfect.
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great work!
i love the first two lines the most.
I like what you did with the prompt, "sugar-coated". It can mean so many things but I like what you did with it here; 27 words is a challenge. congrats on your HM thank you for sharing!!
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Its short but it packed a punch, great write!
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I like it, I bet it killed you to only use 27 words!!
I do know you just love your song lyrics. Well done and best of luck to you... Griz
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I like the rhyme in there, not completely original, but I love the wording in this and the imagery.
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coolness! i get to be the first to comment on this! lucky me!!!
wonderful job on a quick write. i know the feeling of writing a small poem for a quickie contest and wanting to write more and more. and i also understand the wanting to make it into a lyrical write. by the way, when you do make it longer into a lyric, let me know to look for it.
good luck in the contest!
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