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you deserve a love poem

i was sincere
and clear
like water

i really loved you

i was pure and fragil
i was in love that's real
what's the matter?

you judged me so fast
now the hurt you left is what last

but inspite all
you're one of the ones i loved
not the first and not the last
not the worst not the best
my heart would never rest

insipte all
you deserve this first and the last
love peom just for you

inspite that
you judged me wrong

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  • Tzipora
    October 3

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    insipte all
    you deserve this first and the last
    love peom just for you

    inspite that
    you judged me wrong

    - you spelled poem wrong. you should just go back and revise some parts, but i love this write and the title. its a very beautiful title as a matter of fact.


  • Sean S. Palmquist gold member
    October 3
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    Nice work. I felt it and it was deep.


  • hamid
    August 25

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    A beautiful and heart touching poem. Great work friend. clearly showing your strong feeling and attitude. Really love it. Have a good time.

  • DancingStar
    August 25

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    This is a nice piece, well written I feel it could be a little longer maybe? Do a spell check and brush up the presentation of the piece. Over all it's short but strong.
    =)