It was on a day, when the sun shone through the barrier,
That it was the day my heart became full again.
You looked at me, not once, but twice,
And asked with consideration- Are you alright?
And then suddenly I knew, you were everything to me,
It was the day I realized, it was meant to be.
And up ahead in memories, I saw you pass by the door,
The light bounced off the windows and into evermore,
It was you and I, forever, I am yours,
I realized then, my empty heart healed once more…
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that was a great write..i really enjoyed it..
i loved d line "And up ahead in memories, I saw you pass by the door,
The light bounced off the windows and into evermore"
awesome flow..n simply fantastic..
keep up d work..
cheers n take care..
ur pal
~Parth.
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this was a smashing poem, loved the flow and tone. great sentiments thank you for entering good luck
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GoOd JoB
AWWWWW a very sweet and a cute poem. I liked it. The rhymes and flow of the poem is great and shows your affection for that guy.
Keep on writing little girl
And then suddenly I knew, you were everything to me,
It was the day I realized, it was meant to be.
these are very cute lines.
Stay happy
Lucky.
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Great Job. The rhyming is very good and the poem flows very nice. i love the lines:
You looked at me, not once, but twice,
And asked with consideration- Are you alright?
And then suddenly I knew, you were everything to me,
It was the day I realized, it was meant to be.
They rhyming in these lines is awesome. Great job. Very creative. and Good Luck in the contest. Remember keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
nice rhyme scheme throughout the poem..simple but honest..cute..and lovely...a poem that is penned quite dedicately..nicely written
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aawww this is so sweet^^ thank you for entering. best of luck.
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Wow
I see your emotions. It is in all of the lines. Nice write. I hope you will find your true love. -
I like this one. I realized then, my empty heart healed once more…
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