If silence were golden,
we would be metallic beauty;
shining for every word
that gets stopped in my lungs
and never reaches the surface.
If nothingness were visible,
then you and I would see
elaborate illustrations of our lives,
swirling over the great, wide sky...
...and if Quiet could speak,
then the air around us
when I am alone with you
would damage its perfect vocal chords
until its throat would bleed.
With all of this cloudy Novocaine in my system,
I somehow realize what Quiet feels like,
as it touches my insides
through all of the holes that have been punctured
over these years.
I lay with no feeling in my nerves,
while my soul must soak in Quiet.
Every strand of spirit is brutally paralyzed,
as Quiet clashes with every color,
shooting down sentences,
rising from my heart to my mouth,
but who could ever blame Quiet,
when I stand by a voice that speaks,
but never sings
and eyes that couldn’t possibly
penetrate any deeper?
and besides,
who am I to point out the flaws
in a picture that you believe is
perfect?
Author notes
August 25, 2009...
Quiet represents the uncomfortable feeling of nausea you get when you're holding back too many thoughts and feelings, and there's no way of letting them out for fear of fucking up your life.
Quiet represents what it's like when you think you're falling for your best friend.
"Her bear moved no more"
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AWWWW i love it
BRILLIANT WORK please keep it up and thank you for entering sorry it took so long for me to comment
kmp -
woaw.....I think this is beautiful just woaw....the description...the imagrey just just woaw...your soul shines through clearly in this one you hit the nail on the head this is EXACTALLY what I have been looking for in my contest.
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I LOVE this poem
Your AN also helped give a bit of background to this piece,
And I DEFINATELY understand exactly where you're coming from with this one
Absolutely gorgeous -
wonderful a few of my fav lines:...
and if Quiet could speak,
then the air around us
when I am alone with you
would damage its perfect vocal chords
until its throat would bleed.
and besides,
who am I to point out the flaws
in a picture that you believe is
perfect?
best of luck in the contest
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i love your style of writing. you have talent.
'Quiet represents what it's like when you think you're falling for your best friend.'
---oh, i've been there. =/
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