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Death foretold

Impress me
When you undress my soul

 

Impress the smile of death
The smile behind my guise


Undress the smell of death you see
Now you are dying what I foretold


Do not be deceived where death awaits, there can be no surprise
Gasp and toil in my despair


That one last horror when I answer your prayers
You will surrender that life, as in death each moment slips away


When I indulge my appetite in your last goodbye
You will hear my lips blowing hard on your soul

 

There Your heart will feel my anguish, sipping away at your'e every breath

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Here I give you a selection of ten wonderful portraits by Valentina Kallias.

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  • silverscent gold member
    September 21

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    I think this is good. Not great though. I liked the idea behind it, and you used some interesting descriptions. I'd just liked to have seen more powerful original images or emotions.
    Thanks for entering.

  • nice take on the prompt best of luck in the contest