Transfixed eyes behold that which can not be grasped in hands
Like water it shall slip through fingers if you're not to understand:
Life is like a wheel turning continuously, once up may fall down
& happiness is the center of the wheel, never rising, never fallin'.
So to pursue what's constant and never changing
is like running after illusions; you can never keep sunrays in your pockets
but upon the skin they indeed are felt.
So beware, discard ignorance's growth
Search for love & happiness inside your soul
That's the mine in which you should dig for gold
"Happiness is not an achievement nor a goal, simply, it's a way to live"
(C)Noor 8/25/2009
Author notes
Contest prompt:
happiness isn't an achievement
Thanks for reading!
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A contest entry
- happiness isn't an achievement by Venugopal.
1750 points, ended September 19, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any suggestions for improvement?
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Happiness is not an achievement nor a goal, simply, it's a way to live"
love these lines, precious than gold. Congrats
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Beautiful sentiments expressed with wonderful imagery. A very serene tone-like a melody. Very graceful. Congratulations on the gold trophy.
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What a wondeful poem! A beautiful combination of words to express such a good message. Beautifully penned. I enjoy reading your writing very much and particularly this one. It's excellent, IMHO.
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happiness in time graces the mind and the world is a better place when we think on life's graces well said love great imagery here and the words tell an awesome message hugs love♥
ps just re read it again love♥ -
I tend to agree Hapiness is a state of mind. I know so many who have everything and are unhappy and also so many who are happy and have nothing. A lovely write!
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wow
circular life well brought by you,,,at its enter lies the ahppiness...and one shoulds erach your soul for gold.....wise words indeed....love dthis one....noor are you finally fetting rid of your english inhibitions..this peice made me feel so..keep it up
love
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You have wonderfully expressed your thoughts here.
According to me, the second stanza is the best.
Thanks for your entry.
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truth beautifully penned. very well done.
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Wonderful
This is very profound
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I adore this piece greatly.
How you described the thoughts with such imagery that has a nature touch upon them- I haven't seen someone pen like that so yes, I'm impressed
I especially like the message here- simply breathtaking. It is true that happiness is not an achievement or a goal, it's more of an indescribable moment that we choose to take with our heart.
No suggestions, really. This is lovely as it is
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Profound and unique...
Wisely conceived, and sublimely expressed. A poetic-philosophic aliment that feeds imagination to nourish wisdom.
~Hearts in Pursuit~ flows and wonders shows through its brilliant lines.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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wonderfully hopeful
imagery was very warming,,,,
is like running after illusions; you can never keep sunrays in your pockets
but upon the skin they indeed are felt.
a joy to read,,, it brought a smile to my face,,,, thanks for that
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so deep, so true. Real enlightenment in your last sentence
"Happiness is not an achievement nor a goal, simply, it's a way to live"
Thank you for sharing
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Wise words you've penned here buddy,
wonderfully done!!
Ken
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you can never keep sun rays in your pocket
this made me smile..for your words of truth
touch the essence of my mind and dance on my soul
this is stunning hugs love♥ -
this is so true my sweet Noor
life is what we make of it
well said hugs always Angel♥
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Ohh sweetie, this is not finished I am writing it.
But thanks endlessly for your beautiful words, hugs, Noor. -
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LOL I will come back and read it
again when it is done love hugs♥ -
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It's done.
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a good poem penned, though i suggest you look at the rules of the contest as it asks for no more than ten lines for the piece submitted to the contest and this is wat past ten lines.
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Thanks for saving me. lol
I must have overlooked that. I will try again.
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A wise and lovely poem Noor
I think the first verse is wonderful until you get to the word, -''shoved'', takes the verse down market for me, not a classy word like - ''pushed''
Also the word ''Nay'' looks wrong in the third verse(out of contexed some how)
''not an illusion'' may be very prosaic, but IMO, fits better,
Nay in the fourth verse puzzles me also, but Nay*grin, perhaps you can enlighten me,LOL.
Otherwise excellent,over to you.
regards david
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Hmmmm, I used 'shoved' to mark my anger against his ignorance that even if it was shoved under his nose he won't see. lol, I'll try 'push' and see what comes.
I used 'Nay' cause I like the word, lol, guess I still need to know where it should be used and so on before using it.
Thanks alot, you're truely a mistakes detector. lol
~Noor
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