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Rise And Fall

Seems to an end
The light inside
Falling into you
Only to rise again

Sparks of joy
A lovely time
A jilted place
Nowhere but here

Take me under
Above all else
For I rise
And fall inside

Sometimes fought
Logistically inert
Dead inside again
Risen and fallen

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  • Xxcant runxX
    September 16
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    Wow great job
    Loved it


  • xbonniemichellex
    September 11
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    I love it, really good job. =]


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    September 4

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    I liked the opposites in this poem, rise and fall.

    Sparks of joy
    A lovely time
    A jilted place
    Nowhere but here

    Those lines were descriptive. I liked the image of sparks of joy. Nice poem!