From lone moments captur'd in ruby skies;
Where first light treasures e'er thriv'd in repose;
Amid ballads out loud and bold, thine eyes,
Again I wrote, dids't receive myne rose.
Enamor'd was I by impassion'd dreams;
Drawn after thee, I gazed 'pon kingdoms seen;
They were but barren, save their kindl'd streams;
Shadow'd they were by thy treasures serene.
Thou hast bathed in indigo immersion;
Fixat'd was I by beauty most rare;
That left me entranc'd in sweet submersion;
When placid moon dids't ascend to share:
Alas, thou hast perish'd last spring morn;
Twas where jasmine blossom'd, I was reborn.
Author notes
A Shakespearean sonnet (also referred to as an English sonnet) is a 14 line poem in iambic pentameter. Its rhyme scheme is comprised of three quatrains rhyming abab, cdcd, efef, followed by a couplet rhyming gg. It's important to note that the final rhyme must provide some closure in the poem. There shouldn't be any doubt that it's the end of the poem, just as I have done here.
The first three quatrains are about a grieving knight who wrote a sonnet for his belov'd bride, and has returned to where he buried her. It's on one visit in particular, he comes to realize that he will one day be reunited with her. It's at that moment he lets her go, and -- in a sense, is reborn.
All of the classic love stories, such as Romeo and Juliet to name one, have endured centuries because they, not only, provided readers with impassioned love stories, but they ended with tragedy. The purpose for that is to get the readers to feel a genuine rapport with the leading characters. It's a common theme in modern romantic fiction novels, as well.
I wrote this for an anonymous contest, so please don't use my user name if you are gracious enough to comment. Thank you, in advance. 
Get well soon, Pamela.
Photo credit: http://sil-enigma.deviantart.com/art/A-Knight-s-Return-64366031
A contest entry
- For Pamela Lamppa, to cheer her up by ecrivain01.
550 points, ended September 11, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Challenge Us Rounds Contest: Audition round / Prewrites by micaelalseth.
350 points, ended September 20, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love that makes me cry/Yiruma (prewrites and freshwrites) by evershine-90.
760 points, ended October 21, 83 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please feel free to offer constructive comments, as I welcome those.
Comments
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you truly captured the beauty of this picture. Welldone and another shakespearean sonnet... I am not brave enough to master yet.., xx you have definitly mastered it id say
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Beautiful piece, and stunningly penned. Enjoyed reading this, thank you for entering my contest! Best wishes
Evershine -
You've wonderfully crafted this sonnet with the word-usage, feelings, happiness and sadness.
Well-done!
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This isn't bad ...
but you've misused "doth" twice here. You could fix that by changing the word to "hast", of course.
Otherwise, not a bad job.
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Thank you.
I made those changes. I sure do appreciate it. I'm glad Pamela got some smiles from this contest.
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Another beautiful sonnet!
Your words inspire...
Thank you for sharing this Stunning write
and best wishes in the contest!
~Pastel
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to see how you write sonnets, i am humbled that you even glanced at mine. incredibly pieced together making love seem rich and wonderful. this should make anyone begin to feel better. i hope it does with pamela. she is an expert poet.
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fantastic
Thankyou for your comment! Your sonnet is beautiful. I think it captures an unchanging beauty. 'Indigo immersion' has spiritual resonance which alludes to the rebirth. Though on first impression I thought of a knight or soldier calling out to an immortal maiden... I saw a deep well, like a swamp as well as the letting go or elusive feeling to the poem.
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Your brillaint! Sonnets are my favourite form of poetry but I can ney write them well. Your awesome to be able to write like this, so elagant and fantastical! I love your work, if i had gold membership again i'd make a list of all your poems that i would be able to re read over and over again!
Be a good soldiure.
Gorecki -
Awesome, my friend. Very elegantly worded throughout. I bet you dressed up in a suit of armor for this write. I loved the scenery you created in the third stanza, so respectful of the beauty of nature and the lass.
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Wonderfully Penned
Darling this is truly a beautiful Shakespearean sonnet…you gift suspiration with each and ever line. A lovely cadence throughout that makes this so ever more scrumptious. Darling my heartfelt thank you darling for gifting me this most precious moment simply incredible.
Lady E
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it was stunning and very well done i tried a sonnet but it was a disaster so i admire your talent coz this i loved
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A beautiful and loving sonnet. I love a good love poem and you truly did cheer me up. I am sure your wife is smiling with this one too. Lovely words my friend. Thank you for sharing it here. ~Pamela
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I was in a club in high school called the English Club when it was about Shakespear, quite the nerdy type...lol. This is so beautiful...you come up with clever descriptive words...here you are the modern day Shakespear...but Knight is a wonderful name. Excellent. Blessings.
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This is a lovely Shakespearean sonnet, my Friend. I'm sure Pamela will smile upon reading your words, as will Jim. This is the second poem in which I've seen the word "indigo" in today...one of my own favorite shades of blue. Good luck in JD's contest. 
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Thank you so much for this gracious comment.
Pamela has inspired me with her form poetry from the day I first joined AP 2 and a half years ago. I wish her well. She told me about her surgery recently.
Don
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