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Tearing Love

Sadness
Overwhelms me
Only my eyes move
As the tears
Show my love
For you

Author notes

This is from a picture prompt. http://media.photobucket.com/image/love%20images/mysticalmoon_2006/Miscellaneous/Love/love8.jpg . My penname is Kylyn. I think you know that already.

A contest entry

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments


  • Tinselpool
    August 25

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    THANK YOU! You are one of the few who have followed the rules. Though you have not included your penname in the AN, it is up to you if you do not want to reveal your penname as requested.
    This is a beautiful take on the prompt, and from someone my age. I respect that you have created a fresh write from the prompt.

    [Only my eyes move] I did not see how this stanza had to do with the prompt and the rest of your poem. Please explain.

    Overwhelming sorrow
    Eyes blurred
    Salty pool
    Define
    My love for you

    Thanks for sharing and thanks for entering. Good luck.

    Claire


    • Kylyn
      August 25
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      I did include my penname. Well, "Only me eyes move" is because I am crying.