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... Lies Beneath ...

In this world never mine
timeless moons gone by
walking on many other worlds
through the smoke and candle-flame
a constant reminder of being
stays up there
untouched and welcoming
Somewhere inside
left within the layers of thought


The sound of Stained Glass
Your own Reflection
of all that lies beneath
on the plains of the Ever Living
the heart and senses yearn
for Silent crystal swirls
bejeweled and sparkling
untiring in the soothing
a single all-embrace



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  • Stickboy gold member
    October 16

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    A very touching write... it stirs up emotions inside of me while reading, I can relate to your words
    Thanks for sharing this
    Sean


  • smitaanand
    October 6

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    You have expressed your craving for affection and hope of unselfish love finding you at last very explicitly I think.The words are very suitable and without vain bombasticism but a modest and honeyed simplicity that lures the senses into captivity.Thanks for sharing and take care...


  • Eric Marsh
    September 11

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    a fine write....what lies beneath our despair...hope....that's what i feel after several reads..hope and a yearning for love.....take care


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 11

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    so well crafted as each lines grows to a sense of "ah, yes". in particular, "somewhere inside left within the layers of thought" seems so real. very well written.


  • XxAngelofNight22xX
    August 24

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    Touching

    This poem really touched me, i can easily relate to it. Very nicely done, it really reminded me of those times where i felt the yearning for delight and happiness. As i do right now as a matter-of-fact.


  • God of Thunder
    August 24

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    Overwhelming!!

    This is so beautiful it defies my words The Line about the constant reminder of being is very touching. It gives hope to a tortured soul that the happiness it seeks is attainable. Thank you for this, another absolutely astonishing write from you, the Goddess of poetry. A million applause


  • PerVirtuous
    August 24

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    Powerful and meaningful. I loved the lines:

    Your own Reflection
    of all that lies beneath
    on the plains of the Ever Living
    the heart and senses yearn
    for Silent crystal swirls
    bejeweled and sparkling

    Very very nice. I give it three enthusiastic bunnies.


  • StarEyes
    August 24

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    Sis,

    This one touches deeply! This kinda reminds me of some of the talks we have had and what I am longing for once again! Great job! Something about this one, really speaks to me Sis!!! Great job!!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • crvorhees
    August 24

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    I don't know what to say.. Thank you seems so lame.

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