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A Thousand Beats

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the honeyed sweetness of the air
filled her mind with unseen images



the sudden breeze that cooled her cheek
kissed by a humming wing tip



she heard a thousand beats
wing beats, heart beats
hers or his?



her soul soared on tiny wings
flying above a multi-coloured world
of her own making



as he settled on her outstretched hand
she saw an explosion of colour
in one small, white feather ...

 

 

 

...of life

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt.

"She heard a hum above her head. She looked up: a hummingbird made of sky came down from the heavens. It was too small to be seen, yet she could see it. Its blue breast reflected the world as it descended.

Its wings were white, made of writing. Although she did not have (know) words, she recognized them. The hummingbird's wings had been written with a quill pen.

It landed on her knee. It had its back to her. It turned to the left. When it faced her, it had a small white feather in its mouth. She knew to reach out to it. The semalu dropped the feather into her hand.



Soon the roosters were crowing."



Luis Alberto Urrea, The Hummingbird's Daughter.

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  • Bluemonday silver member
    September 21

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    what a wonderful picture you have painted here....Dan


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      September 22
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      Thank you Dan, it's not difficult to write about something as beautiful as a hummingbird.

      Sue
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  • JinSays gold member
    August 28

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    siiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiigh.




    perfect, my lovely.
    thank you.
    love,
    jin


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 28
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      Thanks very much for the gold and your comment ... I adore hummingbirds

      Love
      Sue


  • Aelten
    August 25
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    Beautiful!!
    A~


  • arafura gold member
    August 25

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    Fabulous! This is wonderful. I find it difficult to understand why this didn't win a trophy!


  • ceegeeess
    August 24

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    Honey in thought!



    the honeyed sweetness of the air
    filled her mind with unseen images" wow! Your mind is full of honey my sweet Sue! You see beauty in everything in nature and your words are ssssssoooo sweet ,therefore. Thank you sweet Sue!










  • csmmoms2
    August 24

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    Really lovey, great take on the softness of the beating of the wings. Very good imagination. Did you know that the hummingbird is one of two animals that can't walk? What's the other? -c


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 26
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      Many thanks Chuck for your comment but I don't know the answer to your riddle ... please tell me

      Sue
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  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 24

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    Life for some moves at a rather higher pace than for others

    This is charmingly metaphorical, and delicious to read

    Jeff


  • Legend silver member
    August 24

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    What a beautiful piece to accompany the image posted .
    So brilliantly matched
    Excellent

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