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Within the Heart of Memory



Citified,
late night silhouette
surrounds me
with tall tree tops
hip and gable roofs.
No gazing
to horizon line,
or far distant plains
of countryside
in my neighborhood.





With pad and pen
and eye level line,
heights and depths
of illusion and perception
transfer from mind to paper.
But still, far overhead,
my backyard stars
float high above
elusive, distant
from imagined horizon.




Merged deep within
the heart of memory
a summer night
a drive in the country,
"Stop! Stop the car! Look!"
Departing from High Cliff,
an aptly named State Park,
a cause to throw a blanket
on roadside field, lie on one's back
and see the stars fill the sky.




Breathless,
"Just look at that,"
a night so clear
each star reached out
in vibrant white.
I see it still,
the stars stretched
across the background sky,
crowding, till reaching down
to caress and kiss the horizon line.






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Prompt: The sky


Prompt: "No Line on the Horizon."

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  • iamthebeatles
    November 2

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    This is stunningly brilliant. The words and images work perfectly together, the last stanza especially amazes me.

    "the stars stretched
    across the background sky,
    crowding, till reaching down
    to caress and kiss the horizon line"

    Superb work. Good luck, and thanks for sharing this wonderful piece.

    Peace

    Cassie


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      November 2
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      The experience still exists clearly in my mind,
      city dweller who had never seen the stars reach
      down to touch the earth. Always had been haze
      or buildings or trees in the way. I hoped to
      capture the same feeling as viewing it that night!!

      Thank you, Cassie, for the kind words!

      M-C

  • drifting cloud silver member
    September 11

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    You paint such beautiful pictures with both your words and your art. So many people do not stop to enjoy the beauty around them, they are caught up in the hurry-up-and-go world.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 11
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      Quoting....the best things in life are free!

      Yes, Bonita---looking upward is rewarding!

      Thank you,

      M-C


  • Peteskid gold member
    August 29

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    brilliant night leaves a memory that stays fresh, an impression really - we learn something about how near and far and touchable the night can be...enjoyed this so very much...PK

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 29
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      Hi, PK.
      I was struck with the immensity
      you desribed in your piece,
      the seemingly up-close view.

      Thought you might easily catch
      the feeling here...

      M-C


  • pixiestix gold member
    August 26

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    Beautiful picture created through your words...the image of "big sky" where we are in the midst or more like a piece of the night, in our own right, living in an endless sea of stars.

    I hold a vision of the sky in my memory from the Outer Banks in North Carolina which this read triggered instantly.

    I absolutely love your last verse which captures a sense of wonder and awe you must have felt at the time and embraced in heart of your memory.

    Wonderful take on the prompt, Aes. Thanks for entering the contest.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 27

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      I've always felt a dizzying feeling
      when looking straight up into the stars,
      so being grounded in some way
      a good vantage point, now
      in a patio chair!
      The touching of the horizon line,
      so impressive to the city dweller!

      I'm glad the concept brought that memory
      back to mind, as your prompt of "Horizon"
      did to mine.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 26

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    a very nice poem to read and imagine the tale unfolding. in fact, believe i'm ready to throw a blanket in the car and take a drive just to see where i end up and what i see. well done.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 26
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      Oh! Glad the words inspired you
      to get out and explore!!

      Thank you for stopping in and
      sharing thoughts.

      M-C

  • drifting cloud silver member
    August 25
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    Great poem as always. Studies have shown that people find wide, expansive views awesome. Something about going to the ocean or the mountains or the prairies expands the mind's view as well.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 26
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      Ah, yes, the broader the space,
      the more "mind blowing."
      Like telling the subconscious,
      "OK, open wide now!"

      Most interesting reference, Bonita.

      M-C


  • arafura gold member
    August 25

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    Wonderful imagery my friend. I love that end stanza! Beautiful!


  • Mari Goes gold member
    August 25

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    Ah a poem showing the outer side of a moment!
    Not an usual thing coming from your pen, but seems (reads) as if you have done lots of times, for this reads very well, the imageries are lovely and clear. Such a beautiful night M-C

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 25
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      Ah, Mari, the queen of the moonlit sky,
      such a nice appraisal to hear from you!!

      So many moons and skies you have
      described so beautifully!

      Thank you, Mari,

      M-C


  • Sudo Nimh silver member
    August 24
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    ..within the heart of your memory, we may find memories of our own..drawn into recollection by parallels of experience, i am remembering thoe years spent in the hives of the city, when to see a full scape of stars was indeed a precious gift..well crafted, aes..as testament of gratitude of what might be perceived as life's "small" gifts..the worth is found in the appreciation..
    i love how it has all occurred in the present moment of the minds eye ratherthan a single night of experience.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 24
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      Ah, C-J SN, you always see deeper---and deeper.
      Only a short distance away from open space,
      yet my evening view is well protected by
      neighbor's trees. So the mind dreams on
      and sees and sees...

      Aes

      • Sudo Nimh silver member
        August 24

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        ..i once read of a woman who was born completely blind, yet through some gift of her "inner eyes", could see clearly projections of objects even in deepest space..it was written that she was able to tell scientific observers exactly what numbers and letters were inscribed on the exterior of a satellite which was in orbit around the planet...
        this, of course, is sort of an "extreme end" illustration of my simple point that we can sometimes see farther and clearer with our minds than with our own two little eyes..
        a pity about those trees, though..the skies have been very interesting lately.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          August 24
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          Now that is an illustration---the "inner eyes," the satellite!

          Ah, the untapped power of the mind....

          But always a lot of tapping coming from the SudoC-J!


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    August 24

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    excellent

    Oh sis
    Loved this.....................
    I agree with PicesRainbow.......this read so very dreamy...........
    Pulls the reader right in............a lil bit different than you normally write
    Best of luck in the contest
    I just posted 2 new ones hope you come see me as well
    Hugs
    Susan~~~

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 24
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      When the memory remains
      so clearly in mind and heart
      it deserves its place on
      the page, right?

      Thank you, Susan.
      On my way to your page!

      M-C


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    August 24

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    you took me with you
    to gaze at God's glorious creation
    very dreamy
    and your soul is shoeing
    beautiful artistic creation
    oh so very lovely
    God bless you my friend...
    's for you!
    Thanks!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 24
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      The piece almost did not come to be---
      as I wanted to see if I could create
      a drawing that could capture
      that memory of the stars
      reaching across and
      down to the
      ground!


      Only then
      did I let the words
      finally form in my mind
      and transfer to the page!!

      Thank you, Kathy!

      M-C


  • Denerica
    August 24

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    Beautiful...summer is ending (sigh) I may be blessed to know all the elements of every season in my state, but I love those summer nights. Excellent. Blessings.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 24
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      The Garden State provides much seasonal variety, right?
      And somehow, Summer becomes even more atractive
      as the days wane toward Autumn.

      Thank you, Denise.

      M-C

  • Yemassee gold member
    August 24

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    Ah, this is a different style for you. I think anyway. It speaks more openly and expansively, it somewhat avoids the usual style, being more fluid, more free. And the poem tells a tale rather than defining our inner actions. Yeah, this was a nice write. And it of course speaks of a memory and of a far more romantic setting than the citified one you mention.

    Do you notice that your line length expanded in the "memory" half of the poem as you transferred more into the story teller.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 24
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      You catch everything, don't you?

      I had noticed I slipped more and more
      into the lines, trying to pack in the full
      emotion of the experience without
      going on and on!! Less detached,
      implying more than said!

      Thank you for sharing your obervations,
      Captain Yem. (Attempting to get into
      seafaring, pirate mode!)

      M-C


  • bozoloper
    August 24

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    i enjoy your first stanza, it pulls the reader in. your picture, as always, add countless words to the piece. you've managed to catch the feel of the late night drive (and even later night pull over...) perfectly. sometimes you do need to slow down and just take a look.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 24
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      Some images are implanted
      so strongly they can be relived
      with a bit of imagination.
      But with pen on paper,
      a littlle more difficult.

      Re the first stanza--I look out
      each night as give my herb garden
      a spray, but vision is bounded
      by all the tall nighborhood trees.

      Great to see you here, Loper.

      M-C

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