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Fission

 

Fission of mu
sic in
to separate tones…

 

What do the dis
stances between the
words stand for?

 

And do we
need communication, if…
Fission of sha
des
in painting!

 

What pattern
could
I still be
after this joint! Fi
ssion!

 

Fission
of my thought!

My greatest thanks for the translation to: Valentin Krastev 1.03.2002

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  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    August 24

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    this is good, really liked it....only suggestion I will make is maybe but a '-' after incompleted words so it is easier to follow and recognize that it isn't two separate words. there is also only one 's' in distances so i think it should be
    "dis-
    tances between the"