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The Wind Carries You To Me

The wind dances through chimes into my window.
I know that you are here.
A subtle sense of childlike love overcomes me,
Appearing on my face, an unmistakable smile.

Chiming melodies resemble a song you always sang,
When against your better judgment thought I was not listening.
I still recall every note, word, crescendo, and rest.
Your breaths in between lyrics resound in my ear.
So sweet was the sound,

How I wish you were still here...

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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    October 17

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    oh. the emotions were just so powerful in this. you did a stunning job.
    thanks for entering the contest and best of luck.
    write on.
    ~*~SP~*~
    p.s. congratulations on your trophies in the others!


  • Kathraina silver member
    October 16

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    Very lovely words you've penned here, I can feel the longing in that last line. It makes me think of summer days alone when the wind picks up and memories flood our minds.

    bravo and thank you for entering



    ♥ kate


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 4

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    Aww, this was very touchingly beautiful & heartfelt.
    Such sadness to this piece, but you have
    done a wonderful job at expressing that emotion.

    Lovely piece!

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • Ami
    September 2

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    Wow I really liked this the last stanza was amazing also I loved your wording in this write Great write Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
    -♥Amy♥

  • Miopie
    August 30
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    Charming !


  • Melee Vau gold member
    August 28
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    loss

    relate to this, how can you really loose someone who stays in your heart?


  • blueyez
    August 25

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    my mother passed in 2001, this reminded me of her. Sometimes I can feel her around me. A sweet write!


  • TheWordsmith
    August 24

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    the personification of the wind at the beginning sets the scene for the poem nicely...
    don't know if this was on purpose but there are a lot of s sounds in the poems and it creates the tone intended, as well as the sound of the scene excellently as well...
    well done. :


  • BeachBum1
    August 24

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    stunning

    I'm not the biggest lover of prose but this took me to another place! I loved it! your strongest line.. 'I still recall every note, word, crescendo, and rest.' I love the way the speaker recalls love like music. Like a lost c.d that can't be played again but you can still hear the sound in your head, through you memory of the song! stunning good luck


  • BluesMan gold member
    August 24

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    You have written a beautiful lament in just a few short words. Your poetic voice shines in this little gem you have written. I very much enjoyed and identify with the words in this poem.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Bill


  • Goddess of illusion
    August 24

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    Beautiful.......

    This is truly beautiful, so dreamy and sad,your longing is so strong.... You almost had me in tears...


  • hiddencreativity
    August 24
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    awww

    awwww that was sooo cute and really deep, i loved it!


  • islekine gold member
    August 23
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    Aww another nice musical write!

    Best wishes in the contest and always!
    Write on and on!


  • Poetrist
    August 23
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    Awwh... This is really beautiful. Great job


  • StarEyes
    August 23

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    Perfection! That is what I think! This touches deeply! What a great job you did on this one! This reminds me of many loved ones that I have lost, and the little things that remind me of them.

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 23

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    simply beautiful.

    beautiful emotions, beautiful memories, beautiful testament.

    thanks for sharing.

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